Theresa Handrahan

Eagle Pass, Texas

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Fascinating Love Story

I haven't read horror since Stephen King was on the best seller list, but the title of this one grabbed me. The story about the man who has not interacted in society since childhood is intriguing, especially when he falls in love. This is a story about acceptance and an exploration of the dream we all have that there truly is someone for everyone. It's a quick read at only seven chapters and will hopefully work it's way into an anthology.

My only beef was the paragraph structure. Every paragraph was more or less the same length, so the reading was completely unstructured, like riding a bike on a long, flat road. To maintain the paragraph length, sometimes both people spoke in the same paragraph which was confusing and pulled me out of the story a little bit. But overall, a pleasant read.

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Poetic and Smooth

Written in the poetic, small-town vein of Twilight, this is an interesting romantic tale of fantasy between Hannah, a happy young adult with undiscovered insight, and Ethan, her protector assigned by outside forces. The chapters are well written, each moving the story along with engaging, believable dialogue, interspersed with the inner thoughts of Hannah. Each chapter builds enough mystery to keep a curious reader turning pages to answer lingering questions, only to find answers that produce even more intrigue.

The only improvement I could humbly suggest is that these two lovebirds be a little less mature and clinical, because frequently they are almost businesslike in their interaction. It lacks the irrational attraction that is biologically ingrained in humans to draw us together in the sort of white hot flame that fuses us together so we can endure later tension and hardships as a solitary unit.

In general, though, we are definitely looking at a seller. Great writing

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