Ray of sunshine
This story was better than I had anticipated, but first of all, I will write about what I think should be improved. The grammar, although it was good most of the time, small mistakes made their way. (which is understandable, I need to improve with that too). I was hoping that there would be a chapter the two would adjust to each other. This would've shown the progress of their kinship as the story pursues. Instead, it seemed like a day they met were already very comfortable with each other, which is hard to understand as they both have dark pasts. Therefore you would think that would mean they would be a bit less social. Although I thought it was a bit fast-paced as they got accustomed to each other fairly quickly, I liked how their past loomed through the chapters making it very interesting and full of suspense. Overall the plotline was good just a few tweaks need to be made to make the story more engaging for the reader.
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