Timidon Nodimit

Bakersfield

God I am old, just getting into writing. Grey haired and grizzled. Like reading and writing "B" fiction fantasy adventure and sci-fi. Will do Review Swaps,

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A mind is a terrible thing to waste

Pros: Wow, good book and story. Characters are believable, not perfect or overpowered, and that is coming from somebody who enjoys writing overpowered characters. It has a diverse cast of characters. The story is memorable, has a bit of horror, mystery, and considering you have a group of psychics' probing minds, should make a who done it a snap. The writing is descriptive enough without being repetitive (something I struggle with). I Will have to wait for the next novel to see who else the group struggles against next.

Cons: Not too many to think of. It does have a bit of political and racial bits that might raise an eyebrow for some readers. The story is set in modern times and the current disruption of political groups and factions.

Last Thoughts: Good read, kept me turning pages, especially when building to the climax. It could make a good Netflix movie, though the only real expensive parts to produce would be the mental trips through people's heads.

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I am not Tim. I am just Joe.

Pros: Well, just to start with, this story has all the classic RPG elements in place. If you have been gaming for years, you will be right at home with the story. I usually have a hard time remembering characters and their names, who they are, and why they are even here. Not with this story, The characters are lively, to say the least, each memorable in its own right. The set pieces are great; the shifting house is great!

Cons: Lengthy and wordy. The descriptions are great (and mostly why I can remember them). The chapters are long. This is about the only bump I can see in the writing style.

Overall: Has a good start to the series. You can find comedy, love, and villains getting a bit of Karama rewards. I will be reading the next as well.

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Why I am not in the Mafia

Tags : (Work in Progress) (Review Swap:2020-01-11)

Pros - Detailed Characters are a plus. Lively and Brutal as villains go, there is no shortage of supply, just pick the worst. The scenes are detailed, I can picture where the author has placed the reader. The story is constructed well enough.
Cons - Punctuation took a hit, only because I recognized some of the same flaws in my own work, not a deal breaker.

Overall - With only few chapters to work with, I don't know where the story is going yet. Much like nobles, arranged marriages and such, and a very unlucky gal who has to me married off to a crazy sob. This does leave me to want to punch Nario in the head. Happy Ending in a Mafia family? Only time will tell. More work is going to be needed, and this is a dark story to tread down. Violence can be found in a number of chapters, it's a tale of the criminals underworld, so be prepared.

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It's a small world!

Pros : Just how much of a trainwreck can one watch, allot. Loved the story, it is nice to see some family values once in a while. Got plenty of adult scenes to add some spice for the readers.
Cons : None that I can think of.

Overall: True fantasy, I will be more than likely reading more of these. Fun story, characters are likable. Not too many men like Jax hanging around (that's why I say it's a true fantasy). A refreshing read with many fun moments. It's also nice to read all the comments by the gals reading the story, make sure you read each comment or you miss something. Just remember it is a small world after all.

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The Chimera

Pros: Continuing on the story, Saraid is a very interesting Chimera, a creature with different abilities. The more she bonds with, the more powers she collects. More adult scenes, with some nice humor placed in as well. The writing is interesting enough to keep me turning chapters (coming from a horrible writer myself).

Cons: I read this out of sequence in the series, Did not see an indication on the title that this is Book 2. Also, Chapter 21 is missing (still).

Overall: Liked the story. Though the author is still working out the next book. Looking forward to the next installment.

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Sexy little witch

Pros: A interesting story would make a fun movie as well (or mini-series). Characters are different and likable. It has just about the right amount of adult content to suit a few different tastes. The story could stand even without the extra edgy material. The story also reads well; I can easily follow the action and get into the character's heads.

Cons: Not many I can see, offhand. I felt there was some jumping around on time and locations that I felt I got lost on. Also, I read this out of sequence in the series, Did not see an indication on the title that this is Book 1.

Overall: Liked the story; I read the second in the series first. Will and already have read the second in the series.

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Celestial Mechanics 101

I will start to say off I am a bit biased, for I have worked with the author before. I like her work.

Underworld! Yes, this is my cup of tea (or 6 pack of beer), The rules of the world have changed, . More characters to presented in an expanding universe. This story has multi points of view, a wonderful departure from the style previous two books in the series. I enjoyed the fatansy romp and world changing events. This book in the series dives into the gods of the world setting. More world building and expanding.

You finally get more Anibus time, you see more from his world and point of view.

The +18 rating is still in effect but has been greatly reduced as the story focus's more on the characters than the acts in bed.

How do I rate the plot of the story? Great, I had fun learning about the new world presented. The challenges and the magics used.
How do I rate the author;s writing style? This fit with me just fine. More feelings from the other characters was a improvement that I needed to enjoy the story.
How do I rate the author's technical writing skills? Better than mine so A+.

This review also shows more of reading the series as a whole. More books are coming, she has at least three more in the works in this series. Balance also provides a spring board for a new setting stories to take place in this universe.

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"VV"

I will start to say off I am a bit biased, for I have worked with the author before. I like her work.

Onto the review!

This is the 2nd book in the Crixi's vampire series, A lot happens as the story progresses to the End of the Begining. The ending changes the rules for the books to come, Crixi's world evolves as time progress and so do the characters.

The adventure ramps up as with the threats presented, the scales are in constant swing Lara overcomes new and old threats. The world building is as good as ever, I did enjoy this aspect of the book.

The adult 18+ material is presented, but light in comparison to other novels.

How do I rate the plot? Well, a bit admistrational for the most part. I myself struggled through the first two thrids of the book. When the third act hit, I felt a breeze of fresh air as new territory was being explored. The ending sets up the series for what's yet to come and can be stand alone and complete if you decided to leave the world.
How do I rate the author's writing style? The story is readable. Just the same issue, for the most part, the story is told from the single person view. Not my cup of tea.
How do I rate the author's technical writing skills? Better than mine so It's a A+ in my book. I can read the work just fine.

Out of Crixi's work I have read, this is the weakest in the series. But as with every series, you have ups and downs. The ending is on par for the overall story.

The next chapter begins in Balance (book 3), the rules are completely turned upside down as our characters go into a new environment.

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We Don't Glitter

I will start to say off I am a bit biased, for I have worked with the author before. I like her work. This book got me into trying to write stories myself.

Now onto the review! This is a different take on the vampire legends. The egyp[tion theme that runs through the series provides a good background and setting for the characters. The author created a unique approach to vampires powers, she moved away from the traditional troups, I was impressed. with the mental combat presented, I will say it is unique .The story moves quickly and in some places slows down. The overall pacing is good. I can follow the characters in their lives. The story is a good read and it's not a one-off, the author has more books in the works, This first book works well as an Anthology with Ascendance (Book 2). So if you want to get the complete picture I sudgest you read both.

The story does have some spicey scenes that are for the 18+, but still comparatively light.

How do I rate the plot: I liked it, I can follow it. I got the just of what I needed to enjoy the story.
How do I rate the author's writing style: I myself would have liked to see more of what the villains and the other characters were feeling and thinking, The story is told from the first-person perspective of Lara.
How do you rate the author's technical writing skills: Better than mine, so I give a A+.

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WIP: Chapter 11

Intresting little world, this got to my 10 chapter review point, so this way I have enough to gather something about the kingdom.. Has a diverse cast of characters and I can see their personalities evolving as I read. Calypso is a rogue like character, sneaky and very stand alone. She has been recruited by being in the right place at the right time.

Overal All: Well it's story is still in the works, good sofar.
Plot: Looks like a internal struggle, works for me.
Writing Style: If I can follow and read it, good sofar.
Technical Writing Skills; Better than mine, so that is a + for me. I can read it without diffuclty.

Next review will be when the story is done, though you might look into the comments for any extra details. Adding this to my "Timidon's Ladder" list of Works in Progress to follow. I hope to add it to my completed book list when the time comes.

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Celestial Mechanics 101

Loved the world idea, has a nice bit of world-building. The feeling of being overwhelmed and powerless by a superior force is well done. I like the characters and the setting. I could follow the story easily enough.
This is an excellent story to launch more from if the author wants to continue playing in this world. This story only requires 2 Beers (6 pack - Rating). Good fun.

Length: Overal I thought it was just right for the content created.
Characters: They had flaws and personal issues wich felt real enough for me.
Celestial Mechanics: Could follow the rules once they established.

I could read another book in this setting.

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