TS Rose

London

Two writers, one published, one with an English degree, one a psychologist, bringing both experience and youth to our writing.

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Creepypasta series: The pastas and me

A fascinating tale, written with a great deal of imagination.

The writing flows naturally, and the dialogue and characterisation is very good. There are a few writing tips the author needs to learn, but all in all a very good read, with a good twist at the end.

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Love, Mushroom soup and Murder

Well, who couldn't love a book with that title. It's a great read, full of twists and turns, and characters that are a little unusual with quirks that are interesting. The only reason we didn't give the plot 5 stars is because the story isn't finished, so we can't quite grasp all the details yet. However, this is a tale we can strongly recommend, and we don't say that about many books.

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Astarte, the Adventure

Well now, if you're looking for something different, a new take on literature, ideas that have never been explored before, and a radically unique style of writing, you won't find anything better than this.

Dip your toe in, you won't quite believe what you're reading - it's that good.

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Ten random and very short stories

This is a writer filled with 100 great ideas, and 10 fantastic stories. The quality of the writing is excellent, the tales are intriguing, often with great twists at the end. Just what a good short story should be. This is a book to take with you everywhere, so that you can fill those spare seconds of waiting time with pure joy.

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Patient Blue

We loved this story, from its slightly wacky plot in a post apocalyptic world, to its focus on multiple characters, who blend together seamlessly to build the tale. It reminded us of a cross between the Hitchhikers' Guide to the Galaxy and Stephen King's best known work, The Stand. The author is extremely talented, both as a writer and in his character development, and we can only add to other readers - go on, enjoy the journey.

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Float

Hi, a really great concept for this story. We thoroughly enjoyed the idea of the incident which was so frightening, but your heroine survived it and almost seemed to thrive on it. This chapter is really good, apart from a few grammatical errors. But we can't see much plot because obviously you're only on the first chapter. We'd like to know something about where this story is going next. A last sentence at the end of the paragraph, giving us a clue to this, would be very helpful

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Winter Bear

This writer has a unique story of a backlife returning to haunt her main character. It's well portrayed, with the emotional baggage the situation creates shining through. Grammar needs a bit of attention, but as we don't

think English is the writer's first language on the whole it is a great achievement.

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Witches

A good writer, with some considerable talent at blending first rate dialogue with action. It all serves to keep the reader intrigued.

The story has a lot of convenience in its plotline, and things do seem to happen a bit too easily, without some thought as to how the heroine and her victim arrived in Rome, why he would ever accept a challenge from her, then come without backup. Some more depth to the way in which the plot develops wouldn't go amiss But all in all, the writer clearly knows her target audience, and writes very well for it.

Very admirable to have such a high level of talent when so young.

We are very impressed.

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Days of oblivion

A unique book, that carries the reader through the dreadful period of the collapse of the world and all we know of it. Very well written with a great sense of atmosphere and fascinating characters. A little confusion around the timeline in reading the story, but all in all, we thoroughly enjoyed it.

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Bad Boy's Girl

A great little teen romance, with the technique of seeing things from the male perspective, as well as the female one.

It could do with a twist or two in the plotline, but is well told, with an ending that leaves the reader comforted that good things can happen.

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The Flip-Phone Murders

Great humour as the main character's thoughts are exposed to the reader. Lots to keep us interested. It's hard to know where the plot line is going this early on in the story, but the work on it so far looks sound. It's so refreshing to read something that isn't porn in disguise or a teenage wolf story dressed up as a romance. There's been some good quality research here, or the writer knows this world very well.

A few sentences could do with being split into two, but overall the writing is of excellent quality..

Looking forward to reading more.

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Influenced

A great story, which we thoroughly enjoyed. Stayed up late reading it, so it must have been good. The characters are very well defined, right from the first chapter, the author has a good grasp of writing and punctuation and grammar are excellent - a far cry from many stories on here. Well worth reading.

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The River and the Roses

A remarkably well-written story, with a fascinating main character. A solid ending, and a beginning that captured the imagination right from the start and held it.

The plot held together well, with all the details revealed very carefully, and not too soon. We loved it.

By far the best novel we have read on Inkitt.

T & S Rose.

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B.R.A.I.N

Hi,

We enjoyed your story, which had a very good plot, and some interesting characters. Nice to read something that isn't a basic romance for a change. The philosophy was engaging, and challenging too.

The novel is generally very well written, and we can only make a few minor comments about things to improve it.

In your first chapters particularly, you have a tendency to 'tell' rather than 'show.' Don't tell us what has happened up to now, make us experience it as your character moves through the scenery. For example, let her look at a graph, exclaiming at the sudden raise in temperate to an even more dangerous level, or let her interact directly with a robot who is doing something important, so that we can experience what this future world is like, rather than just reading about what has already happened. As the story progresses you have more show and less tell which is great This is often a problem at the start of a book when writers feel like they have to share everything all at once. The idea is to slowly let the reader learn more and more of the problems and background as you move through the chapters, by experiencing them.

Don't give them everything at once.

A second issue is the number of times you use a verb to explain that someone is speaking. Thankfully most of these were 'said' but even that can become very repetitive. It is not always necessary to indicate that someone is speaking with the 'said or alternative' verb. If there are only two people, it is obvious that each one is likely to speak in turn so just leave it out.

Alternatively, where there are more than two people, you could use an alternative approach instead of a speaking verb.

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'May I bring you a drink of some kind?,.' The waiter, who had glided silently up behind us, now stood slightly bowed, ready to receive our order.

I could have screamed at this interruption. It was hard enough trying to find the right words for what I meant. 'No, not now.'

He nodded and moved away clearly sensing the atmosphere between us.

We hope these are helpful comments, and wish you all the best for your future writing career.

T & S Rose.

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Going home

We love this story, and the only reason we haven't given the plot 5 stars is because we can't yet see how it finishes.

The characters are immaculately crafted, each bearing the trauma of their past like a cross. The way they come together is fascinating. The writing skills are excellent, with the writer producing the whole story in the present tense, giving a sense of immediacy to the tale. It's not easy to write successfully in the present tense, so very well done.

We look forward to reading the rest.

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Deviant tendencies

Well written, with characters that are complex . While it is easy to understand the deviant behaviour based on the dreadful background of the main character, it would be nice from time to time to feel a little more kindness so we could develop a bit more sympathy for him.

The plot is fascinating, and we look forward very much to reading more. A highly enjoyable story.

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Crazy Rich Kids

We must admit the title didn't tempt us, and we thought, 'Oh no! Not another snowflake story with characters bursting with a sense of entitlement. But as soon as we got into the story we realised it wasn't that sort of tale at all. We loved it - and wish it was finished.

The premise is excellent, and unexpected, the writing is very sound, and the characters sing - not literally, but certainly figuratively.

Great book - we would recommend it to anyone.

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Blue tomatoes

Just the sort of story we enjoy reading - police based, twists aplenty, and a deep knowledge of the culinary industry and the supermarket stock market. It's well worth the read if you also enjoy mysteries, dramas and police tales.

And unlike so much that we read, it's well written, reflecting London at both its best and its worst.

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Protected at all costs

Hi, you have truly mastered the concept of the twist in this very short story. We would recommend it to everyone. A minor error, early on. As her girlfriend speaks you need to start a new paragraph, but overall very well written, and the plot was great.

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C.O.R.A.

A truly brilliant twist to the second chapter.

We really enjoyed this story which gave new meaning to the concept of AI.

The possibilities from here on in are endless, and we were sorry the story ended here. It could have gone on and on. Very well done.

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Mike and Boo and Sulley

Hi a lovely tale, that speaks of lost time, and lost opportunities. We realise this was the message you were aiming for, but a little more explanation for those of us who didn't follow Monsters Inc. would have been useful. We feel also a slightly stronger end could have been plotted, by perhaps giving them all one more memory to share of the day. Someone to defeat, a mystery to solve - something like that. But all in all excellent writing skills, filled with humour - we love the door that had been added.

Keep writing, and if you could find you way to reviewing a chapter or two of our work Psychic we'd be grateful. We can, at the very least, promise short chapters.

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Innerworld: A Grand Lights story

This story made us laugh all the way through, with its delightful hero and intricate characterisations.

Rather like the genius Stephen King, the world's best horror writer, this writer can remember his youth and can write about it in a way that genuinely makes his characters believable.

Good quality grammar, excellent writing style, and a plot that doesn't disappoint. The only negative thing we can find to say about it is that we think the title could be improved.

It's a bit cumbersome and not quite catchy enough.

We can recommend this for anyone who doesn't limit their reading to purely erotic romance and sex.

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His pomegranate queen

A great title for a great book. The synopses, beginning and following early chapters left us a little confused, but the story itself is very well crafted, and its plotline, based on the Gods, is very sound. We enjoyed learning about the Gods' perspectives and found that the more we got into the story the better it became.

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Blood moon rising.

We thoroughly enjoyed this story, and can recommend it to anyone wanting a slightly unusual read. None of your average girl falls for bad guy romance - no, this one has teeth. The twist at the end is great, the writing is generally very good, with just the occasional grammatical error. So come on everyone, let's cut loose from the norm, and read something that is a bit of a challenge for the brain - like this story.

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Guarded

The writer has an excellent grasp of internal dialogue to demonstrate what her characters are thinking. The dialogue between characters is great too. The book is short on descriptive sequences, but this seems to fit with the natural style of the book. The plot however is undeveloped with few twists and a focus on hard sex as opposed to seduction over time. There are occasional grammatical errors, but on the whole this is a very good story.

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Nighmares of someone else's choosing

The author has a unique style, blending the background seamlessly with the present, and by chapter three the tension has truly racked up as we see physical injuries plague the heroine just as much as her nightmares.

It's shaping up to be an excellent horror tale.

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The neglection

A really sweet little story, that tugs at your heartstrings.

The writer could make a bit more of the plot in showing the struggle of Max's time on the street, but all in all, a good tale, with a little twist in the middle.

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The court of love.

This brief tale pulls at the heartstrings in discussing the types of love, and the impact when love goes wrong.

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What happened to Erin

This writer is exceptionally gifted. She holds the reader's attention as questions about what happened to Eric pile up relentlessly. The horror that is reintroduced as a second girl disappears reminds us of Stephen King's greatest novel It. We loved this tale, and look forward to reading much more as it develops.

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Songs from the Heart

For a teen writer you write with an old soul, bringing heartache and emotion to your song. We enjoyed reading every word of this, and would love to hear it set to music. Very well done.

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Stripped roses

A great tale showing a relationship at two opposite ends of the spectrum. We particularly liked the reference to the sensitivity of smell during the pregnancy.

Very well told. The only thing we wondered about was how well this couple would cope with the sleepless nights to come.

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Hellfire

An epic tale, which we are thoroughly enjoying. The plot, characters, and dialogue intertwine in a way that carry the reader further and further into this supernatural world, believing every moment of it.

We have one tiny comment on the frequent use of verbs such as said, explored, explained, commented, etc.

About half of these can be left out, particularly if there are only two people talking. And even when three or more are talking, a gesture or action is often better than an adverb and verb to describe which character is speaking. But all in all, a beautifully written tale, and we look forward to what is coming next. Everyone should read these stories.

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The Venus Flytrap affair

An enjoyable read.

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Bad boy goes to another world

Hi, we loved how much thought you had put into the differences between your characters, and how much of this showed in the first chapter. The plot is interesting, and we look forward to seeing it develop.

You do need to change your punctuation quite radically, as it is littered with commas that should be full stops. Every time you use a new capital letter, there should be a full stop before it, not a comma.

We wonder if this story wouldn't work better as an anime (picture) story, which could help to demonstrate some of the characteristics and actions scenes through pictures. But anyway, well done on getting this far with your writing, and keep it up, you've got some writing talent.

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Awakening

A very well written science fiction story, with exceptional characters and a fascinating premise. We enjoyed this story very much, and look forward to seeing much more from this author.

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The Bad Girls Hypothesis

Good quality writing, with the character's personalities clearly thought through.

The plot line seems to be executed well although we will need to read further chapters to see if this plays out with any twists or turns. We're enjoying the story.

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Truth of the Beginning of Times

Hi. We really liked your idea of a time-travelling genius. He's a little too perfect though. It's best to make your characters have some flaws as it means you can identify more with them. We also loved the constant DING of the gaming device/computer he took with him. Just the right thing to bring you back to Earth.

You are obviously not writing in your home language, so well done for doing this. The thought of writing in French, German or Zulu terrifies us, although we have a smattering of all of these languages. So you are very brave to be attempting this. Your grammar will have to improve a bit if you want a lot of people to read your stories, but you are doing the right thing in writing because that will improve the grammar enormously. Best wishes for your future writing.

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There's a place for us

We enjoyed this story, and found your opening chapter to be a thought-provoking commentary of what it's like to be a homeless person.

A really nice novel, with the homosexual romance making it different from most other tough-boy-finds-love-with-shy-girl novels. It has a sensitivity to it. There are a few places where it would be better to end a sentence, or at least separate the clauses with a semi-colon, where they are jammed together for no obviously good reason, but aside from this, very well written.

T&S Rose.

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Fighting for control

A nice story, with an interesting concept at its heart.

The plot is a little obvious, but the characterisation is excellent, and we really enjoyed the dialogue which was very good. The first chapter is a tiny bit stilted with too much tell, and not enough show, but this gets much better by the second chapter. An enjoyable read for those who love a good romance set in an unusual community.

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Texting him

A really great read, with the added benefit of a wonderful sense of humour that makes you laugh throughout the story. We would have like a few more twists and turns in the plot, and there are a few minor grammatical errors as the story moves into narrative rather than dialogue mode, but these were easily forgivable. Totally enjoyable,, and fully recommended. T & S Rose

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Wish upon a demon

Hi,

Please ignore our previous review, which was based on the fact that the Inkitt website froze when we were reading it, so all we could see was the summary, and none of the rest of the story.

We've now read a little more since the website opened again, and find the story engaging.

There are a couple of places where the punctuation could be helped along, but this doesn't compromise the story. Well done.

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T & S Rose.

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Her Possessive Blackguard

Hi, Just finished your story. It's a good teenage read, full of love, lust and sex, written in a sensitive way with good quality dialogue, and action. Personally, we'd like a bit more plot, but maybe that's just us, because our story, Psychic, is heavily plot driven.

We enjoyed this though, as it offers a light read and the characters are engaging if a little typical.

The writing style is cleverly done and the story doesn't drag anywhere. Altogether, a story we could recommend.

T & S Rose.

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The Fox and the Wolf

Hi. Interesting concept, which made this story somewhat out of the ordinary. There was a bit of confusion at first, as the writer jumped around from present to past tense, then back again. But this was resolved after a chapters. The dialogue is well written, and natural. There is a need to insure that the possessive apostrophes are included. e.g. mum's choice not mums choice.

Sorry to be pedantic, one of us has a English Master's Degree. All in all, well done, and enjoyable.

T & S Rose, writers of Psychic.

p.s. It's T . Rose who is the literary boffin not me - S. Rose. I just liked the characters.

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Psychics

Thanks to all those readers who have left reviews. You've been very generous and we've loved your views and your tips. T & S Rose

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