Struggle to Read
I'm extremely confused. The story starts with your MC looking at their own body. We don't know how she died or why. Just that she is, which is fine. After that it seems to get jumpy and dodgy. And I don't know where I got disconnected at.
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It definitely grabs your attention un the beginning, where there's more description, but after that it's gone. At least for me, I can't speak for everyone. MC's grandmother makes a brief appearance, but we don't know what either of them looks like. Or why this side character is important to the plot. Aside from to give the MC a message. There are some discrepancies with what descriptions are there.
A person's eyes cannot be bare...that would be kind of scary, if not mortifying, to see. I would think that 2 ghosts sharing the same astral plane would be able to see the other ghost walk away (my own opinion) instead of just vanishing.
I like the story, I just can't get into it because I feel like there's something missing from the first chapter and I wish I knew what it was besides descriptions and an explanation. I feel like too much was left for the reader to decide. Which sometimes is okay. But doesn't work well for this story in particular.
I will be keeping an eye on this one though. There's something intriguing about what you've started working on.