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Super idea, very curios to read more

Sorry for the delay, i really liked the prologue and can't wait to find out edris's plan to rid of Zeus.
I did find a difference in the level of English between the character's conversations and the overall writing of the prologue however, I feel that due to the fact that they are gods, they should have a more old dialect of English perhaps?

I loved the main character, her observations, and hints of personality, and how the chapter unfolds.
I would like to suggest keeping some details about her for further discovery along the story? such as the detail about her father.

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Love the magic and the imparting!

Hi! AMAZING work imparting the effect you want to create on the reader by having them read about it "I let myself get immersed in the story.."

With that, consider telling less in the summary, its point is to intrigue!

The more you use the 'word' magic, the more it loses its potency. Show, dont tell!

Remember - you need not explain magic. It just is!

If you find this helpful and encouraging, please consider taking a look at my
first work on inkitt "The Two Moons" at https://www.inkitt.com/stories/1048268

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