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Decent Read, could benefit from editing
Overall the story was excellent
I felt a little jerked around with the MC's rapid mood swings. One second angry and ranting at a doctor, the next bragging to everyone about what she could do. I know, young teens and their moods swings, but this just grated more than flowed.
The grammar and spelling are mostly fine. But 'Grandma' instead of "Grand Mal", using 'angry' as a noun in 'My angry'. As well, a few cases of extra, and missing words, with some jumbled word orders.
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