Z. Bleu

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Erotic and intriguing...

Online platforms and lust—one of the most intriguing combinations; she can't touch, she can't smell, yet for Mikaela, Mr. Santana is as real as he could ever be. The first two chapters (published so far) set an exciting premise. Will her fantasies materialize? How far will they go?

The writing style fits the narrative; the lack of physical connection is expressed through virtual communication. I can't comment more, I feel like I need to know Mikaela better. That's why I can't wait for more chapters!

Good Job!

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Will get you hooked!

Existential and philosophical, this novel will teleport you into the psyche of Pablo, a man with big hopes and dreams.

The writing style is what got me hooked; even though, some paragraphs were a bit chunky and in a need of some editing; the most descriptions and emotional scenes were beautifully crafted. What I liked even more was the balance between dialogues and inner monologue; it didn't feel forced and propelled the story forward.

Kudos to the author, and I hope to see you grow!

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Dark and Mysterious

Used and abused, Amari, the cursed princess, has spent most of her life being controlled by the most toxic men. Even though at the first glance she might seem like a cliche broken damsel in distress, Amari exhibits her unique strength that, in my opinion, might unravel in the later chapters.

The world story is set in is magical, to say the least; the descriptions immerse the reader into the mysterious and dream-like lands. The dialogue is realistic and conveys the emotions that are one of the most prominent aspects of this novel. GREAT JOB!

A few notes I'd like to add:
There were some inconsistencies when it comes to technicalities; sometimes the narrator jumps between past and present tenses which makes reading a bit confusing. Also, there are some unnecessary repetitions (e.g.: "The green dress slid down her thin BODY. Fear crept up her BODY.) and some sentences/paragraphs lack effective connecting, but nothing too distracting.

Overall, even though the story needs some polishing, it is definitely captivating and intriguing. I felt as if the first four chapters are only the beginning and I can't wait to find out what happens next!

THANKS for a lovely reading experience!!!

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