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Eclipse Park

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Summary

ECLIPSE PARK Some memories should stay buried. Lily Bosconovitch notices things others miss. But when a familiar symbol appears somewhere it shouldn't, even she can't explain it. Alexander Hayes has questions, a few suspicions, and an irritating habit of noticing more than he should. Pistil laughs at almost everything. Almost. And William Hayes might have a joke for every situation, but some silences are harder to fill than others. Four friends. One forgotten amusement park. And a past none of them remembers quite right. An invitation arrives. A symbol reappears. And somewhere in the distance, something that should have remained still begins to move. What happened at Eclipse Park twenty years ago? More importantly... Why does it seem to remember them?

Status
3d ago
Chapters
2
Rating
5.0 (1 review)
Age Rating
13+

Chapter 1: The Things We Forgot

1. An Ordinary Kind of Disaster

At 4:17 p.m. on a Thursday, Alexander Hayes was cheating.

He would have called it strategic adaptation.

“You changed the settings,” Lily said.

She sat at one end of the couch, one leg folded beneath her, staring at the game on the television with the cold concentration of someone reviewing a business acquisition. Her black hair fell over the shoulders of her oversized hoodie, the ends brushing against her wrists as she adjusted the controller.

Alexander, sprawled in the armchair opposite her, didn't even look guilty.

“I improved the settings.”

“You lowered the difficulty.”

"For you."

"How generous. You lowered it for yourself."

"I lowered it because watching you lose was becoming genuinely uncomfortable."

Pistil made a noise from the floor that sounded suspiciously like a dying kettle.

William, sitting beside her with a packet of chips balanced on his stomach, pointed at Alexander. “That's the most embarrassing excuse I've heard this week.”

“It's Thursday,” Alexander said.

“Exactly. You've had three days to prepare a better one.”

Lily's character fell off a digital platform.

The room went quiet.

Alexander slowly lowered his controller.

“Don't,” Lily warned.

“I haven't said anything.”

“You're thinking loudly.”

“That's a serious accusation. You should have your legal department look into it.”

She turned her head toward him.

He smiled.

It was an irritating smile. An entirely deliberate smile. The kind of smile that suggested he had already calculated seventeen possible outcomes to their conversation and found every single one entertaining.

Lily looked back at the screen.

Then she beat him.

Not narrowly, either.

Alexander's character went flying off the final platform, and the victory screen appeared with a cheerful little jingle that seemed designed specifically to humiliate him.

Pistil sat up so quickly that she nearly knocked over William's chips.

“OH, THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL.”

William clutched his chest. “A tragedy. A historic tragedy. Somewhere, a violin has just broken its strings.”

“Both of you are banned from speaking,” Alexander said.

“From your house?” Pistil asked.

“From my immediate surroundings.”

“So, your house.”

Lily set her controller down. “Rematch?”

Alexander looked at her.

The smile returned.

“Absolutely.”

“You'll lose again.”

“Probably. But I'll look good doing it.”

Pistil fell sideways onto the carpet.

“WHY WOULD YOU SAY THAT OUT LOUD?”

William was laughing too hard to help her.

Lily's mouth twitched. Not quite a smile. Not quite nothing.

Alexander noticed anyway.

He always seemed to notice the smallest changes in her expression, which was one of his more inconvenient qualities.

The game restarted.

Outside the wide living-room windows, winter had turned the sky a pale, washed-out grey. The bare trees lining the driveway stood perfectly still. Beyond them, the city carried on with its usual afternoon noise: traffic, distant construction, the occasional impatient horn.

Inside, the heating hummed softly.

A half-finished drink sat on the coffee table. Two empty snack packets lay beside it. William had somehow managed to get a chip crumb caught in the fabric of his headphones, and Pistil was trying to remove it with the seriousness of a surgeon.

It was ordinary.

Comfortably, almost aggressively ordinary.

The four of them had been friends long enough that silence rarely felt awkward, arguments rarely lasted, and nobody bothered asking permission before stealing food from somebody else's plate.

They knew one another's habits.

Pistil joked more when she was tired. William became unbearable when he was winning. Alexander flirted with danger, sarcasm, and occasionally his own reflection. Lily became quieter when she was thinking, which usually meant everyone else should stop talking.

Usually.

“Lily,” William said.

“No.”

“You don't even know what I'm asking.”

“You're going to ask me to order food.”

He paused.

Pistil stared at him. “That's actually tragic.”

“Fine,” William said. “I was going to ask if you wanted to order food.”

Lily picked up her phone. “What do you want?”

“Something fried.”

“That's not a cuisine,” Alexander said.

“It is if you believe in yourself.”

Lily began scrolling through restaurants.

“Pistil?”

“Fries. Something spicy. Maybe noodles.”

“You always want noodles.”

“And yet the world continues to provide them. Miraculous.”

“Alexander?”

“Whatever Lily gets.”

Pistil's head turned slowly.

William stopped eating.

Lily didn't look up. “Then you're getting nothing.”

“Cruel.”

“Efficient.”

Alexander leaned back in his chair, perfectly content with the exchange. “I'll survive.”

“You say that now,” Pistil murmured. “But one day she'll order something with coriander, and we'll discover the limits of your devotion.”

“Coriander is fine.”

“That's what they all say.”

The room dissolved into another argument.

For a while, the afternoon remained exactly what it had always been: four friends in a warm room, talking over one another, making terrible jokes, and treating the world's problems as if they could all be solved with a delivery app and enough snacks.

None of them knew that, before the evening was over, they would each receive something that had been waiting for them.

Something with their names on it.

Something that remembered a place they had spent most of their lives trying not to think about.

And something that, for reasons none of them could yet understand, had chosen this particular Thursday.

2. Four Seperate Afternoons

By six o'clock, they had gone their separate ways.

Not dramatically. Nobody stood in the doorway exchanging meaningful looks. There were no promises to meet again at sunset.

William left with the remaining chips tucked under his arm.

Pistil followed him down the driveway, arguing that the chips were technically communal property.

“You ate most of them,” William pointed out.

“I supervised the eating.”

“You supervised them directly into your mouth.”

“Leadership is a burden.”

He handed her the packet.

She blinked at him.

“What?”

“Nothing.”

“You're being suspiciously nice.”

“Take the chips before I change my mind.”

She took them, grinning. “I knew there was a heart in there somewhere.”

“Don't spread rumours.”

She was still laughing when she reached the gate.

Alexander stayed a little longer. He had misplaced his phone, which turned out to be under the cushion directly beside him. Lily found it in four seconds.

“Terrifying.”

She handed him the phone.

Their fingers brushed briefly.

Alexander glanced at her, but Lily was already turning away to collect the controllers.

“You have a meeting tomorrow?” he asked.

“Two.”

“You're going to sleep at a reasonable hour?”

“Define reasonable.”

“Before sunrise.”

“Then no.”

He shook his head. “Try not to work yourself into the ground.”

“I'll add that to the agenda.”

“Put it near the top. I hear you ignore things at the bottom.”

She looked at him then, properly.

There was no joke in his expression now, only a quiet concern he hadn't tried to disguise with a grin.

“I'll be fine,” she said.

“I know.”

He said it without argument, as if he trusted her to manage herself even when he wished she would make things easier for herself.

Then he picked up his jacket.

“Good night, boss.”

“Good night, nuisance.”

He left smiling.

Problems that stayed where she put them.

Her phone lit up with a message from Alexander.

Alexander: You know I let you win, right?

Lily: Of course.

Alexander: Good. I was worried you'd developed delusions of skill.

Lily: Sleep well.

Alexander: You too. Try not to buy another company before breakfast.

She set the phone down.

Then, despite herself, she smiled.

Across the city, Pistil was halfway through a bowl of noodles when her phone buzzed.

She had changed into comfortable clothes and was sitting cross-legged on her bed, a video playing on her laptop while she scrolled through messages. Her room looked like a stationery shop had collided with a laundry basket. A notebook lay open beside her, abandoned halfway through a list that simply read:

Things I need to do.

Beneath it, in increasingly chaotic handwriting:

1. Things.

The notification came from an unknown delivery service.

She ignored it.

A second notification followed.

Then a call.

Pistil frowned and answered.

“Hello?”

“Delivery for you.”

“I didn't order anything.”

“It's marked as a personal delivery.”

“That's a fancy way of saying someone has made a mistake."

The caller gave her an address and asked her to confirm it.

It was correct.

Pistil looked toward her bedroom door.

“Okay,” she said slowly. “I'll come down.”

She placed her noodles on the desk and pulled on a cardigan.

For the first time that afternoon, she wasn't thinking about William's stupid jokes, or whether Lily had actually ordered the extra fries, or the fact that she had somehow lost her favourite pen while sitting perfectly still.

She was thinking about who would send her something without telling her.

And why.

William received his delivery while trying to beat a game level he had been stuck on for nearly an hour.

The knock at his door made him lose.

He stared at the screen.

Then at the door.

Then back at the screen.

“I'm going to remember this,” he told the game.

The game did not apologise.

His delivery was a small, flat envelope with no return address. The courier asked him to confirm his name, handed it over, and left before William could ask any useful questions.

William turned the envelope over twice.

Nothing.

No company logo. No address. No cheerful little sticker saying Have a wonderful day!

“Extremely ominous,” he decided.

He carried it inside and placed it on his desk.

Then he finished the level.

Priorities.

Only after he had won did he return to the envelope.

His name was written across the front in neat black lettering.

WILLIAM HAYES.

Not a label. Not printed text.

Handwritten.

He didn't recognise the handwriting.

That was the first thing he disliked about it.

The second was the symbol pressed into the flap: a dark circle overlapping a pale crescent, as though something had been placed between the moon and its light.

He ran his thumb over the impression.

The paper was thick, almost old-fashioned. The symbol was pressed deep enough to catch against his skin.

William stopped smiling.

Then he did what any sensible person would do.

He took a photograph and sent it to the group chat.

William: Either someone is sending me a very dramatic invitation or I've been selected for a cult.

Pistil: Finally. A career opportunity.

Alexander: Ask about dental.

William: I'm serious.

Lily: Don't open it yet.

William stared at the message.

He hadn't expected Lily to answer so quickly.

He took another photograph, closer this time, and sent it to her privately.

William: Recognise this?

The reply didn't arrive immediately.

For a few seconds, he watched the little typing indicator appear, disappear, and return.

Then:

Lily: Not sure. Keep the envelope.

William glanced at the symbol again.

He had a strange feeling that he'd seen it before.

Not recently.

Not somewhere he could name.

He told himself that was ridiculous, set the envelope on his desk, and went to get a drink.

He left the light on when he came back.

He wasn't sure why.

3. The Symbol

Lily received her envelope at 6:43 p.m.

It arrived in a plain outer sleeve, delivered by a courier who knew her name but had no useful information about the sender. The tracking number led nowhere. The delivery record showed no company name, only a sequence of digits that didn't match any recognised courier format.

That alone would have been enough to irritate her.

The envelope itself was worse.

She placed it beneath the desk lamp and examined it without opening it.

Heavy cream paper. No visible fibres out of place. No watermark she could detect at first glance. The flap was sealed, but not with adhesive she recognised.

And there was the symbol.

A dark circle covering part of a pale moon.

Lily's hand went still.

The room remained quiet around her. Her computer fan whispered. A notification blinked in the corner of her screen. Outside, headlights moved across the distant wall.

She knew that symbol.

The certainty arrived before the memory.

She could not have explained where she had seen it, how old she had been, or why her mind had reacted so sharply. The knowledge sat somewhere beneath conscious thought, like a word she could almost remember.

She picked up her phone.

Lily: Everyone. Now.

Pistil: Is this about the envelope? Because I have one and I have already decided it contains either money or a curse.

William: If it's money, I call dibs.

Alexander: You call dibs on money you haven't seen?

William: I'm planning ahead.

Lily: Bring yours tomorrow. Don't throw anything away.

Pistil: That's reassuringly normal.

Alexander: What happened?

Lily sent a photograph of the symbol.

The typing indicators appeared almost at once.

Then stopped.

Then appeared again.

Alexander: Where did you get that?

Lily: My envelope.

Alexander: Don't open it yet.

Lily looked at the message for a moment.

It was the second time someone had told her that.

Lily: I wasn't planning to.

Pistil: Why does everyone suddenly sound like we're handling a bomb?

William: Because Lily said “everyone. Now.” That's usually the tone she uses before announcing that she has purchased a building.

Lily: I have not purchased a building today.

Alexander: Today?

Pistil sent six laughing emojis.

Lily ignored them and returned to the envelope.

She took photographs from several angles, measured its dimensions, and inspected the seal beneath magnification. The paper was unusually resistant to bending. The pressed symbol showed tiny irregularities around its edge, which suggested a physical stamp rather than a printed image.

The ink, if it was ink, did not reflect light the way ordinary pigment should.

That was interesting.

Not impossible. Just interesting.

She documented everything, then opened a separate encrypted folder and saved the photographs.

Her first instinct was to identify the paper stock.

Her second was to determine who had delivered it.

Her third, less welcome instinct, was to search for the symbol.

She resisted that one.

Not because she feared what she might find, but because she wanted to understand what she already knew before an algorithm buried it under a hundred irrelevant results.

At 7:02 p.m., she received another message.

Alexander: I'm coming over.

Lily: Why?

Alexander: Because you sent a picture of a symbol I've never seen before, then went quiet for eleven minutes.

Lily: I was examining it.

Alexander: Exactly.

Lily: That isn't a reason.

Alexander: It is when I know you.

She considered arguing.

Then she typed:

Lily: Fine. Bring your envelope.

His reply came almost instantly.

Alexander: Already in my pocket.

Lily: Why?

Alexander: Because I am an excellent student.

Lily: You once submitted an assignment with your own name misspelled.

Alexander: A deliberate test of the education system.

She set the phone down again.

For the first time since the delivery, the room felt too quiet.

The symbol was still there beneath the lamp.

A dark circle.

A pale crescent.

Something covering something else.

She closed the desk lamp and moved to the window.

Outside, the winter sky had darkened. A few stars showed between the city lights, faint and distant. The moon was not visible from where she stood.

She tried to summon the memory attached to the symbol.

A bright place.

Music, perhaps.

The taste of something sweet.

A voice saying her name.

Then nothing.

The fragments were too small to trust.

Lily disliked unreliable information, especially when it came from inside her own head.

She returned to her desk and turned the lamp back on.

The envelope had not moved.

She was almost annoyed with herself for checking.

4. The Things That Arrive

By the next morning, all four envelopes had been photographed, examined, and discussed in a group chat that had gradually deteriorated into an argument about whether the sender was a criminal, an eccentric millionaire, or an extremely committed theatre student.

They still hadn't opened them.

Not because they had agreed to wait for a particular reason. They had simply reached the conclusion that there was little to gain from rushing, and several ways to make a stupid mistake.

They met at Lily's office shortly after lunch.

The building was quiet, its glass walls reflecting the pale afternoon sky. Lily had arranged a private room away from the main floor. Four envelopes sat on the table, aligned neatly beside a notebook.

Pistil arrived first, carrying a drink and looking offended by the entire concept of an unannounced delivery.

“If this turns out to be a subscription box,” she announced, “I'm going to be furious.”

William entered behind her. “What if it's a subscription box for cursed objects?”

“Then I'll be furious with better reasons.”

Alexander came in last, holding a paper bag.

Lily glanced at it. “What's that?”

“Food.”

“We ate yesterday.”

“Some of us have continued to require food since then.”

He placed the bag on the table and slid a wrapped pastry toward her.

She looked at it, then at him.

“What's this for?”

“You skipped breakfast.”

“I had coffee.”

“That is not breakfast.”

“It contained calories.”

“I'm sure your body appreciated the legal technicality.”

Pistil stared between them.

William leaned toward her and whispered, loudly, “They're flirting.”

“We can hear you,” Lily said.

“Then my work here is complete.”

Alexander pulled out a chair, looking entirely too pleased with himself.

Lily took the pastry.

She didn't thank him aloud, but she moved it beside her notebook rather than pushing it away.

He noticed.

He didn't comment.

That was one of the things about Alexander that made him difficult to dismiss. Beneath the jokes, he paid attention without making a performance of it. He could be irritating on purpose, but he rarely mistook irritation for permission to ignore someone.

Lily opened the notebook.

“Four envelopes. Same paper. Same seal. No return address. No identifiable courier record.”

“Four names,” William added. “No message.”

“That's not entirely true,” Pistil said. “Mine has a symbol.”

“That's the same thing,” William replied.

“No, a symbol is a message. It says, ‘Dear Pistil, please develop anxiety in an aesthetically pleasing way.’”

Alexander picked up his envelope and examined the flap.

“Whoever sent these knows our names, our addresses, and enough about delivery systems to avoid leaving an obvious trail.”

“Which narrows it down to every person Lily has ever annoyed,” William said.

Lily looked at him.

“Fine,” he amended. “Every person who knows what an address is.”

She ignored him.

“The material is unusual. The symbol appears to have been stamped, but the surface doesn't behave like any standard ink I've tested. I'm still working on identifying it.”

“You tested it already?” Pistil asked.

“Preliminary analysis.”

“Of course you did.”

Lily tapped the notebook once with her pen.

“I also searched for the symbol.”

The others went quiet.

“And?”

“I didn't find anything reliable.”

Alexander tilted his head. “But you recognised it.”

“Yes.”

“From where?”

“I don't know.”

He studied her face for a second, as if considering whether she was withholding something.

Then he nodded.

“Okay.”

That was all.

No interrogation. No suggestion that she must remember. Just acceptance that she had reached the edge of what she knew.

For some reason, that made it easier to continue.

“There's something else,” Lily said. “The symbol reminds me of a place.”

Pistil's expression changed.

Only slightly.

But Lily saw it.

“What place?” William asked.

“I can't remember.”

Pistil turned her envelope over in her hands. “I think I've seen it, too.”

Alexander looked at her. “You do?”

“Maybe. I'm not sure.” She rubbed the edge of the paper with her thumb. “It's like remembering a dream after somebody asks you about it. You can feel that there was something there, but the second you try to look directly at it, your brain gives you a blank wall.”

“That's surprisingly poetic,” William said.

“I can be poetic.”

“You once described a sunset as ‘the sky doing extra.’”

“And I stand by that.”

Alexander's smile faded as he looked down at his envelope.

“Does the place have anything to do with the park?”

Nobody answered immediately.

The word had changed the room.

Not dramatically. Nothing visible had happened. The lights remained steady. The heating continued to hum. Somewhere outside, a phone rang and was answered.

Yet the four of them had become very still.

Eclipse Park.

The name belonged to an older part of their lives.

A place they had visited together once, when they were children. A place that had been famous for its enormous central attraction, its elaborate themed districts, and the kind of spectacle people travelled across the country to see.

A place that had closed roughly twenty years ago.

There had been an incident.

There had been an investigation.

There had been headlines, rumours, official statements that explained almost nothing, and eventually the quiet disappearance of the whole subject from ordinary conversation.

The park had become one of those things adults mentioned less and less until children stopped asking about it.

The four friends had not forgotten it entirely.

But they had learned to leave it alone.

“I haven't thought about Eclipse Park in years,” William said.

“Neither have I,” Pistil replied.

Alexander watched Lily.

She was looking at the symbol again.

“Do you think the invitations are connected to it?” he asked.

“I think it's possible.”

“That's Lily for ‘yes, but I don't want to say yes until I've proved it,’” Pistil said.

“That's Pistil for ‘I don't want to sit in an uncomfortable silence,’” William replied.

“Correct.”

Lily closed the notebook.

“We need more information before deciding anything.”

“Agreed,” Alexander said.

William looked between them. “So we investigate?”

“We identify the sender first,” Lily answered.

“And if the sender doesn't exist?” Pistil asked.

“Everyone exists.”

“That's an upsetting level of confidence in humanity.”

“I didn't say everyone was human.”

William slowly turned toward her.

Lily looked at him.

For half a second, nobody moved.

Then Pistil burst out laughing, and William threw a napkin at Lily's head.

The moment passed.

But not completely.

5. A Memory With Missing Pieces

They agreed to give it a day or two.

There was no deadline printed on the envelopes, no date, no instructions, and no obvious reason to rush into anything they didn't understand. They would compare notes, search the available records, and decide what to do when they had something more substantial than a symbol and a collection of uncomfortable feelings.

Alexander suggested visiting the park.

He did not suggest it immediately.

He waited until they had spent nearly an hour going over the same possibilities, until Lily had ruled out several ordinary explanations and William had proposed that the sender might be a very wealthy person with an unusual hobby.

“Then we go there,” Alexander said.

Pistil stopped scrolling.

“To the park?”

“That's the place we're all thinking about.”

“The place that's been closed for twenty years?”

“Unless one of you has a better theory.”

“I have several,” William said. “One involves a secret society. One involves an elaborate prank. One involves Lily accidentally acquiring a haunted envelope through a corporate merger.”

“I have never acquired anything accidentally,” Lily said.

“Exactly. That's what makes it suspicious.”

Pistil folded her arms. “Even if the invitations are connected to Eclipse Park, going there doesn't guarantee we'll find anything.”

“No,”Alexander agreed. “But it gives us somewhere concrete to start.”

Lily studied him.

He wasn't being reckless. Not exactly. His expression was relaxed, but his attention was sharp, moving from the envelopes to the notebook and back again. He was considering the same problem she was, only from a different angle.

He didn't need her to tell him the park was dangerous.

He was asking whether avoiding it would actually make them safer.

That was a better question.

“We won't decide today,” she said.

Alexander nodded. “Fair.”

Pistil exhaled. “Wonderful. We have postponed the terrible decision until a later date. My favourite kind of progress.”

William reached for the last pastry.

Lily moved the bag out of his reach.

“That's Alexander's.”

“Alexander said whatever you get is fine.”

“That's not how food works,” Alexander said.

“It is in this household.”

“I'm not part of this household.”

“You have a key,” Pistil pointed out.

“That's unrelated.”

“Then give it back.”

“No.”

William managed to steal half the pastry while they argued.

Lily let him.

The conversation moved on to other things. School memories. Work. A ridiculous video Pistil insisted everyone watch. William's ongoing battle with a game that seemed to have personally insulted him.

For a little while, Eclipse Park retreated to the back of their minds.

Then Lily noticed the time.

The meeting had lasted longer than she intended. The envelopes were still on the table, their dark symbols facing upward.

She gathered them into a single folder.

As she lifted William's envelope, something slipped from beneath it.

A narrow strip of paper.

It landed face down beside her hand.

Lily frowned.

“Did this come with yours?”

William leaned forward. “No.”

She turned it over.

The paper was yellowed at the edges, as though it had been kept somewhere damp or exposed to sunlight. It was smaller than a bookmark, its surface marked with a faded blue line and a faint crease down the middle.

There was writing on it.

Not a name.

Not a message.

A number.

17

Beneath the number, almost rubbed away, was a tiny drawing of a star.

Pistil leaned closer.

“That's weird.”

William stared at it.

“I've seen that before.”

Lily looked up. “Where?”

“I don't know.”

Alexander took the paper carefully, holding it by the edges.

“Could be anything,” he said. “A ticket number. A locker. A seat.”

“Or a ride number,” Pistil added.

Nobody spoke.

The park's central attraction had been enormous, a structure so large that it had appeared in nearly every photograph taken from inside the grounds. They had all seen pictures of it when they were younger, and they had all visited the park together once.

They had memories of bright lights and music, of running ahead and being called back, of being promised something sweet if they stopped arguing.

But childhood memories were unreliable.

They could change shape over time. Details slipped away. Imagined things found their way into real recollections, and real things became impossible to distinguish from the stories told about them afterward.

Lily reached for the paper.

“Give it to me.”

Alexander passed it over.

She held it beneath the desk lamp, examining the faded number and the tiny star.

Something stirred in the back of her mind.

A queue.

A painted railing.

A voice telling a group of children to stay together.

And a sign.

Not the name of a ride.

Not the name of a district.

Just a number printed in white on a dark background.

17.

Lily's fingers tightened around the paper.

She couldn't place the memory, but she knew one thing with sudden, uncomfortable certainty.

She had seen that number at Eclipse Park.

Not in a photograph.

Not in a news report.

She had been there.

As a child.

“Lily?” Alexander asked quietly.

She looked at him.

For once, she had no immediate answer.

Pistil's usual humour had vanished. William was staring at the star, his brows drawn together, as though he could force the memory into focus by sheer concentration.

Lily placed the strip inside the folder.

“We're going to need the old park records,” she said.

Her voice was steady again, but she didn't like how much effort it took.

Alexander didn't argue.

“Then we'll find them.”

Outside the glass walls, the afternoon had faded into evening.

The lights of the city came on one by one, filling the windows with distant reflections.

On the table, the four envelopes lay inside the folder.

Their symbols were hidden now.

But Lily could still see them in her mind.

A dark circle covering a pale moon.

And somewhere in the part of her memory she couldn't reach, a child was standing beneath a sign marked 17, looking toward the enormous heart of a park that no longer existed.

The child was waiting for something.

Lily could not remember what.

She could not remember who had been standing beside her.

But she was beginning to suspect that Eclipse Park had not been waiting for them to remember it.

It had been waiting for them to come back.

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