Grant Ayers

Werewolf

So I read all the way through the book (7 chapters at the moment) and can say a few things about it. So the plot of the story so far has revealed that Femi (The MC) and Nick's (The guy that you technically meet early on but not really, lol) kids are missing and they have to go find them or they will go find them. It's sort of unclear as of right now. But the great thing that I've seen in the plot is the author's way of showing us her characters. Femi is a cringy sort of person with life in her eyes. She's chaotic, beautiful, and wild. Amazing character. Whereas Nick is more calm but still cringy. And with both of these characters, the author really provides them each with their own unique voice. So for the plot, I'm going to give it five stars.
Now the author's writing style I would have to say is also chaotic. Because there are some pieces of it where you can tell that the author either took a break or just wanted to fast travel through the "boring" part. Which is sort of lazy (take that pill how you want it), but then you get to parts like the dialog where it's beautiful. The author uses the body language of the characters to simple facial expressions to really up her game when it comes to the emotions that Femi portrays. And how I would fix that first part of the author's story is just gritting my teeth and doubling down on some details. Like the forest, explain the sun, the ground, the sky, the trees themselves, the aroma, and the overall feeling. The job scene, go into more details there. And so on and so forth. Because of missing details like that, I'm going to give the writing style a three.
Now, we get down to technical writing skills which I have a few opinions on. One it's seven chapters in early development. So the author is in the writing stage where she shouldn't be looking for corrections but instead should be looking for plot holes or what the story will be looking into next. But from what I saw the author did really well in her spelling and grammar so big points on that. And as for technical writing skills I like to add creativity in this slot. Like how creative was the story and what can audiences get from it if they are looking for a book to read? And here is a few reasons why I think I've read this book and took interest in it. One it's a slow burn of a book which just means that you can take your time reading it, absorbing the beautiful emotions the author portrays. The second reason is that the characters are unique and can make you laugh and smile. The third reason is I think outside of the werewolf genre this author does something unique that I really don't want to spoil. So creativity is there and I think it's really the star of this whole novel. So writing skills get a five star.
With a nearly perfect score, the book deserves a nearly perfect overall rating of four. I say this because, with a few adjustments, this would be a star on the shelves in real life. I truly believe that.

amazing

I thought your story was amazing to say the least. I hope you keep writing and one day gets this work published.

scp 049

SCP vibes. Cool

cool

it was a really good story. I 1000% recommended

worth the read

it was worth the read

Sorry

Okay so I'll try and point out everything in the comments but I hate to drag your story through the mud here. Because what you do really well is character development. But it is the emotional portrayal that is not hitting home. All your characters talk like robots with he said she said type of deal. Mix that up and I'm 100% sure that the story would be a five-star.

Cool

It's a great story, can't really say much else.

I don't like it

So I know that I'm supposed to give reasons, and I will but keep an open mind. Stories ain't written like this. This type of writing style, the way that it's plotted out, is just overall trash in my eyes. I don't like it and that's my opinion. And why I would give it an overall rating of three stars. And on top of that, there is misspelling and everything is in italics. Why? This isn't how you write a story. I'm sorry. It has a few good things about it. LIke characters. That's about it.

Great

I should rank this story lower because it's only one chapter. Actually, I think I will because not a lot can be said about it. I don't know what people expect when they ask for a review for a book that only has one chapter in it. you can't judge it really. I got nothing from the first chapter.

Sad

I think the novel is a bit sad but with it only being at three chapters who knows what can happen? So go check out the book.

Great story

So I know I'm late to review this, but I found the story really good and would recommend that you take an interest in it as a reader.

Okay

So let's get down to the finest of details of the story. One thing that I like about this story is that it's not what you think it would be. Like it's only four chapters at the time of this review. So without getting that fifth chapter, I can't tell you anything about the plot without A, spoiling, and B, without just telling you all about the book. So it's my opinion that I'll rate the plot at four stars. Because I think there were just a couple of elements left out of the story that I couldn't read right now. And with this being a review swap I couldn't wait longer to review it. And so in chapter 4, I have to say that the character is good but there is a lack of action, something to push the plot forwards so far.
The writing style is okay, I think the author ends their chapters too abruptly but again that's just my opinion. And with that said I think that the author could find better ways to cap off her chapters. Because everything up till the end of the chapters is amazing with only the ending feeling incomplete. Like the author was in a rush to finish the chapters. Which is never nice to read about. So docking a star for that as well.
As for grammar and all that I didn't see any mistakes so five stars.
Sorry for the quick review but with this score being 13/15 I think it deserves either a five or four-star. With the story being incomplete at the moment I'll give it a benefit of the doubt and give the overall rating of five stars.

Damn

So let's go through this one step at a time. Your summary is legit bigger than all of your chapters. Like,.. It hurts to read. It took me fifteen minutes and like that, I wasted fifteen minutes. The story was none, existent guy. I hate to be like this but we'll begin with your plot.
I'm going to be rough and say that I'm docking three stars off the bat. One for your summary is longer than all of your chapters. another star because I didn't get what you were trying to relay in the story. All I got was that it was about terrorism. And that's all. You're not painting a picture, you're not informing, you're not telling a story. So I think that your plot suffers from the lack of detail and just having no thickness to it. And the third star because I'm just upset at reading such a thing. Like I know that's not a valid reason so I'll give you your third reason why I think the plot is worth of being a two-star. It is a book that maybe took the writer a total of maybe an hour to write. It was simple, not over-detailed, and could have really just not existed. I know it's harsh but I don't think the author was serious when they wrote the story. And so I'm giving the plot a total of two stars.
Okay, writing style time. This is where the author catches a break. So writing styles can vary and each author has a unique writing style. As I said above the author was not very detailed or informative. So what makes this writing style worth at least four stars? I give the author the benefit that they can at least write clearly. No mistakes were seen and no misspells. Plus the words used were big and juicy. That part of the story was the best part. Looking up the definition for the big words that were used. So the author gets 4 stars on writing style. And while we are at it the technical portion is five stars.
At the end of the day, the author succeeded in writing a clean manuscript with little to no errors. But at the great cost of the plot and the story itself. And as a writer, author, and journalist I think that even though the total of the story would be 11/15 which would give it a three-star I have to go with my beliefs. Which is the belief that the plot itself is the most important thing in writing. And sure you can have a neatly written and correction-free book but if the plot is nonexistent or bland then who is going to read it? So I say this as kind as I can. The story International Criminal in my eyes is worth 2 stars. I'm not going lower one because I don't want to come off as attacking this writer. And two because the story is edited to perfection. It truly does look great. And at the end of the day, it's my opinion. And I can't prove to inkitt why I scored the plot so low. I can really only say that there wasn't one to really follow and it didn't connect with me. So if you are a reader and you feel the need to prove me wrong then, please. Pick up this story and delve straight into it.

Great story

Needs a bit of editing but otherwise great read

Great story

I think there were up and downs but overall I think I would recommend it to a friend.

The One That Was Taken

So here we are again with a three-chapter book. And this is what I got from it. As it is still in progress I can't really judge the plot of the story as there is not a thick enough one to go off of. It's too early to say who's my favorite character, and overall, it's a fast-paced story. I don't even think that all three chapters combine equal five pages. But the author gets their kudos when it comes to writing a plot that is hooking. In every chapter I wanted to know what would happen next, what was going to be the upcoming cliffhangers,.. and so on. The characters themselves are awesome, adventurous with a little bit of fucked up, meaning relatable, lol. And I think that if I did have to pick favorites mine would be Adriano. Thinking that this is only the beginning and not wanting to be harsh I'm going to give the plot five stars. Because I didn't see anything wrong other than the pace of it. And face pace can work, and it has so far.
Now writing style. It reminds me of when I started professionally writing a year ago. Flawed and a little too box-like. Boring in other terms, wanting to explain every little thing to the minute detail. With that said the other does feed us information about the story but either put it in awkwardly or too blunt. Like in chapter three the very last paragraph, chapter two paragraphs the first three sentences and then goes on to the sixth and seventh sentences. Was put awkwardly or didn't put enough emotion into it. So I'm docking a point for your writing style is still new, not experienced enough to write something that is encompassing your vision perfectly. Meaning it'll get better after time. But that time isn't now and not with this story. So four stars.
Now, this is where I might step on some toes if I haven't already. I have no intention of being mean or trying to get this author a bad score on purpose. The punctuation, grammar, and sentence structure is messed up, and some words aren't spelled correctly. Not that big of a deal but worthy already of a docked point. I would normally not dock a point if it was only one or two words but there were at least six or seven different words misspelled. And I'm docking another star because of the awkward sentence structure that I already mentioned. So three stars.
Okay now as we get into the overall rating I think that it's best to remind you that out of 15 stars the story would be a 12/15. And that's cool since some stories can't even get 10/15 on this app. The story The One That Was Taken is a clever story with amazing characters and a plot that I think is acceptable and hooking. If you're into a thriller romance subplot then this is the story for you. I would suggest this to my friends. But wit the flaws that it has now I'm going to give it an over all rating of four stars.

Great overall

So the sex scenes were very vivid but the story was lacking. I just couldn't get connected with the characters. And then there were the whole dialog tags that were wrong. Plus the misspells there and here in the chapters. Either way, though I would give it a second read.

damn

I know I have to explain but it's all just going to be slander. The story is easy to predict and the writing style is very blunt and robotic. And don't get me started on the technical stuff. It's bricks of words after bricks of words. On top of that, I think the author spelled the book's name wrong. Angel is spelled A-N-G-E-L. So when you read the title of the book it reads out like "Oh please return to me obtuse angle." It's funny. This is ironic because the story itself isn't. It's very serious about kids doing kids' stuff. I feel like a jackass too saying this stuff. Like overall it's one chapter that I'm reviewing. So I can't comment on the plot because the plot hasn't developed, The writing style can change later on and I'll look like a fool. And as for the grammar and formatting, its terrible but a simple edit will fix all that. So with everything said, Scarletlove I think there's room to grow. And maybe when it's around the fifth chapter I can change the review. Because I'm sure you're talented and I want to see you grow. The one thing that I'll say that you absolutely just hit out of the park with, was your dialog. You made your characters have an individual voice. So great for you. I hope you keep writing.

Found my reflection

So with only there being two chapters, I can't really go off of anything besides what is already written. And the way I judge and review stories I'll be going through them and tell the reader why you should read it and what the author can do/ what my opinion is. Let's begin with the plot. While I do think it is interesting because the characters really bring it to life and give it that suspense that most romance stories have I also think that it's very rushed. Like we are introduced to a new character every chapter (That's not saying much as there are only 2 chapters) as we get pushed into another person's perspective. So I think I'll dock a point in the plot because it's hasty and unclear.
Next up is writing style. This novel is written like a movie script. And that's not to say that the writing is bad but there are downfalls to this hasty type of writing. Where the characters feel more alive the background lacks. Because that's what writing a movie script is like. You provide a vague place and allow the dialog to tell the story. And you see that in this book "Found my reflection in your soul, " it just reads as if the author is rushing his story. Again this goes back to point one of the plots right where I say that the pacing of the lot is rushed. And this writing style doesn't benefit the plot downfalling it just the same. So with that said I think that it's fair to dock the writing style a star.
Lastly, we have writing skills. The grammar was off as a few sentences and a few dialog tags were missing commas and sometimes just missing a letter in a word. An example would be chapter one-third sentence of the second paragraph. With the formatting also not being your typical novel format instead portrayed as a movie script format is just not my taste. I don't think it works for most novels. With that said I'll dock that two stars. One for the mess-ups in grammar I suggest a pro writing aid and the other star for the formatting of the book itself.
So the overall score would be 11/15 which would be around the low C area. And therefore I'm going to give the overall rating 3/5 stars. The story is hooking maybe a little difficult to read, but overall I can't wait for more chapters to read. It has potential and the author is really good and giving each individual character their own voice. I hope that the author takes my constructive criticism. Because the problem that they have is formatting and just a couple of edits to make. And I would slow down the pacing of the story by a tad because it just all felt a little rushed within the first two chapters. So reader come check out the story "Found My Reflection In Your Soul" by Reecha K

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Have the stars. I laughed my ass off.

K-belmonte

There was a review just like third from the top and I think I agree with it and say that the story had ups but mostly downs. Like grammar was a big hit to this book out of everything else. Like it was confusing who was talking which made the story frustrating to read. Plus the constant addition of plot points and characters made it harder to attach yourself to a character and what they can do. I read up to chapter five and said that I think I should put it down. Now where the story did well was the descriptions of characters and backgrounds. But you can have a cool-looking character and a cool background but without a decent story that is somewhat easy to follow your just not going to have a cool book. So sorry if this sounds harsh but I think points have already been made and I can't just copy and paste another person's review because well, plagiarism, but K-Belmonte took the words out of my mouth and I agree 100% with his review.

Didn't connect

The plot in my opinion wasn't able to connect with me on a personal or emotional level. But with that said the book is perfectly written and I can see others liking it.

Demons!!!

I want to say The Office/Riverdale/Harry Potter/Percy Jackson vibes. The twist is that there are fucking demons!!! The idea is cool and I didn't read any mistakes so good for the author on that bit.

Great

So I would say if you just broke up your paragraphs this would be a five-star rating all the way down. That and if you maybe bump the speed up a little bit. But that's just a suggestion. Either way, it was a good two-chapter read.

Great novel

So I read up to chapter five and it's a slow burner of a book. Right now in chapter five, it's picking up quite nicely. My favorite character is Fergus because he just is relatable and just a badass of a guy. Now the main character is a female that I found forgettable and sorry if that's the case just my personal opinion. The descriptions were okay like the background was either there or not. If the background was described then it would just be two characters talking or fighting. A lot of info dumping too. But that's not a bad thing I love a good info dump.

Lovely

Lovely story

cool

So the problem that I have with this book is that I just don't like nor do I think it compares to that of other erotica. Like erotica doesn't just have to be about sex. While sex does play a key role in erotica, the sex itself is secondary to the development of the characters and plot. A good erotica writer knows that, no matter how great the sex is, there still needs to be a good, solid story if one wants to hold a reader's interest. And this story lacks any good story. And then it also lacks in the sex department too. So both of that kind of make me want to just give the story a three-star. But I do have to give credit where credit is due. For instance, I think that the best part of the book was the description of the characters. There were a few spelling mistakes as well but who gives a shit about that? Like it's a free book that will one day be worth something so I'm just glad that I got to read it now. Maybe in the future, the author will work out these kinks. I don't know how they'll do it but I imagine it would take 1 a lot of coffee, 2 a whole new plot line, 3 and a few emotional breakdowns. Kidding on that last part. But I do hope that the author continues to write.

Generic

Like want fantasy and bad assery then check this book out. There's a few spelling errors but what really weighs the book down in my opinion is that it was more or less a classic predictable story.

Fire

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Loved all three chapters

Love all three chapters and all of the concepts.

Funny

It goes in and out of 1st person pov and 3rd person pov. That enough is what is making this book a three star because a lot of it was hard to read. But what could be read was very hilarious. So read it if you want to laugh

Loved the twists

This is a story that kept me on my toes. Now it's a short story that felt like a whole movie. Oh and that twist at the end there wasn't something I expected. Like it was a whole moment captured perfectly.

Great

So I want to say that the story itself was great the author knew how to write and manipulate emotions through her characters. Sylvester was my favorite character out of everyone. But what the author struggles with is separating dialogue tags and maybe just thickening a few details of the story that I think I would love to see as a reader. But I would say that this book is a solid 4/5 stars. Because the dialogue tags made it very confusing who was talking and this made it harder to imagine the story. Oh, and the plot felt rushed and a little unclear. Because the train of emotion was, happy, sad, angry, happy, horny. In that order lol. but I'll be clear. If the author interacts with this review I'll bump it up to 5 stars because one author interaction is excellent and because maybe they can explain a few things for me. But in the meantime, you should for sure check this story out.

Interesting concept

So the idea of the entire book is original and a very fun thing to think about. Imagine if your first love, your "first time" and blam have to marry that person. I was laughing because my friend had just told me about his first time and how he hated it. Lol. But I wish there were more of a reason why the law exists where you have to marry the first person you exchange a sexual experience with. With that said the formatting was terrible and the whole thing was just a big block of text. That could easily be fixed so I'm not going to rag on it too much.

Ayaan

The main character is relatable and fun to read about. And just seeing how everyone interacts with him just gives an all-around cheery feeling you can tell that the author was having fun with this story. I liked the setting, the plot, and just the atmosphere of the book.

🔥🔥🔥🔥

Not much to go off right now. Dialogue was rough but the speech was amazing to read. I felt inspired from this one chapter and I think I would love to read more. I can see this book hitting shelves of every home in the usa

Cool

The story was magnificent. Gave off a dark feeling and some really good heart warming chapters. The story kept spiralling slowly into darkness as Alex gets poked and prodded from life. I've read up to the seventh chapter but I plan on finishing it. I'm surprised that it hasn't had more attention.

bad ass cover

I love the cover, and the story, and saw very few mistakes to nit-pick about. I can see this book going places. Great job author. And sorry it took me so long to write a review.

15 chapters in

I read up to fifteen chapters and I have to say other than the missing commas the author didn't miss a single thing when it came to this story. The characters are relatable and I thought the story was really sweet.

Great

So I've reviewed stories from one chapter to up to 90 and the similarity of the both of them is that every word is impactful in some way. I mean by this that the author has already shown us quite a bit with one chapter. Now it took me a week to get to it but now I have a regret. Lol. I should have read it sooner and I want to read more. I want to see these characters grow and show me a few twists. Oh, and before I continue, when I review stories, I base it on what I've read. So the grammar and writing style was good. I think that was truly extraordinary. But the plot is a 2 star because there is not a lot of plot to go off of as of right now. So with that said I think it's only fair to give it a two-star until the story grows. And I want to see that. Hopefully, this will be motivation.

P.s. I loved the story. I hope you continue writing. And that many readers get to see your imagination.

Good Idea

So this whole thing is just his idea of what time is and how he views it. There is a quote and some other colorless points. And so there isn't a plot and it's complete by chapter 1. So, in my opinion, I think that the idea and his views are five stars. But when it comes to clarifying his viewpoint I think he could do better. Pull out more examples, more quotes, and just stretch your viewpoint a little so that it's understandable for someone who doesn't have the point of view. LIke I think time is something that we have in our grasp and that we don't just follow it. That we stand there and have a choice. To either follow it or make it into something amazing. And if this was your point or if I'm off topic then it's the writer for not clarifying. See what I mean? Like clarification and some more explaining and I think this would be a great little study for people to come to check out and maybe start up a conversation. Either way short and creative. Like it.

I'm Batman

So I love the concept but there were just bricks of words and then the unseperated dialog and nearly any space. But with that said I would love to see more chapters instead you the author fixing the first chapter. Mainly only for one reason. Because like every single writer on this planet the more a person writes the better the writer. The more person edits the least amount of writing happens. But hey at least you'll be good at editing. LOL. What I'm saying is I want more chapters and your grammar could use a tad of tinkering.

Go Nick

So I think the highlight of the entire story was chapter 4. Just because I love the descriptions. It was easy to read and If I'm correct it's still ongoing so if you're a reader this is your chance to influence the story in how it's written. Leave a comment and a like because this story is worth it.

Loved it

Couldn't see anything wrong with the story. And hey if you want to argue about it read it and come back to me. But what I have to say about it is perfect characters, great emotional manipulation, and the background of the world is exactly what I wanted to imagine in a story.

Wow

I liked it. It's short sure but it was the perfect day for a short story. I can't wait for more. This is what I love about inkitt. Is that you get to read a chapter a day and the author updates with fresh ideas. Love it and you as a reader should read this story as well.

Bad Ass Read

I had fun reading the story. Truly the author has a gift for writing. As the characters were relatable and just amazing to read. Most of it was a movie inside my head as the descriptions were awesome and fluid. Amazing truly.

Ok

I see why your other reviews are sorta speechless. Like the story itself was kinda stale but had its moments. Like a meh story. It kept me reading sure but not of interest but more because I was waiting for a little pizzazz. But we both know it comes and when it does I enjoy the heck out of it. So if your a reader then this one should be on your reading list.

Good for one chapter

The beginning was great but with there only being one chapter there wasn't a lot to say about the book in a whole. Either way, you should read it you'll have fun.

A harem story

So the story as far as I read makes me want to read it more. Only because I met the man named Andrew. The biggest douche in the world but yet I can see it ending with Weber in his arms. And just by reading a little fraction of what the story has the author showed me a world where this creative and strong woman meets all these different dudes and the interactions between the men and the main character made me burst out in laughter one of the best reads that I've had in a bit. Especially when it comes to romance.

One Chapter Wonder

I loved reading this! I can't wait to find out what happens next. But putting everything in italics is off-putting. Overall it's a good start but it's way too early to review such a thing. More chapters, please.

I laughted through the entire book

Not saying that this book is a joke. But for what is labeled a horror it was more like a dark comedy. Because the main character is so MESSED UP. Especially in the first two chapters. My favorite chapter in the book was chapter 6 and would tell everyone that if they can get there they struck gold. It's amazing to read the story and can't wait for it to be updated more.

Edge of my seat worthy

I was thrilled to read this story. From the beginning to where the story is right now I was at the edge of my chair reading from my laptop just zooming through chapters. I think if anyone is interested in a fantasy/thriller they should hop on this book!

Wait! I'll update this!

So off of the first chapter, it's needs editing. But I think I was warned that before reading this. So getting past all that I read this book as a reader. And what I thought was that I can't wait to read more chapters of this story. Because I honestly see this story reaching thousands of readers. It has potential out the ass in lamens terms.

Not what it seemed

See when I first saw the cover I thought it was just going to be some sort of high school love triangle thing that I wasn't going to be interested in. But no this book blew my mind away with its badass fight scenes, cool characters, and a very brave female protagonist. There wasn't really one mistake that I saw reading it. Would 100% recommend it to any other person looking for a spectacular fantasy.

Flawless

This story is fantasy. It's engaging, beautiful imagery, spectacular fight scenes, and spelling and grammar as far as that goes is just on point. This is a unicorn of stories. I think that if anyone has the time they should invest it in reading this story. I thought it was amazing to read it. Every second was just page turn after page turn. And the best part is that it's still going. I can't wait to read more chapters!

Long but worth it

The story in itself is very long for the six chapters that it has. But while reading it I hardly noticed as chapter flew by one by one. It's an enticing book that deserves more readers.

The immortal prisoner

I liked it. Yes I am the author and yes I am bias. But it was fun to write and I think that others can enjoy the short-story

Great

The story was great

chapter 5

so I've read up to chapter six and I can say there are ups and downs between chapters. Like there were times when the mood of the story would just drop on its head. With that said though I'm going to continue reading it and hope that others pick it up.

Gods!

I like this book. It's one that I think a fifteen-year-old me would've loved to see on a bookshelf. The only real complaint I have is that I don't really like the cover. I feel like it should be more stoic but that's just my opinion. I do like the background myths and how the characters portray their emotions. Feels like I'm learning a lot about the history of this world that this author wrote.

fuck yeah

great story

five stars

five stars

horrific

like it just wasn't my go-to thing to read. The chapters were great the spelling was tremendous but the plot was just too actual of a vibe.

Awesome

The story is great and I would read it again.

creative out the butt

It was beautifully written, the maps, the character art. All of it was great.

Rad

I liked it and I think others would too. Keep writing and I'm sure the readers will keep coming in.

Great

So I don't like the slow pace of it all but over all I think the story is onto something with the symbolism. Love that part of it all.

lovely

I loved this story, great descriptions.

need more chapters

The great story would reread it. Great characters, great description

love the cover

I like the setting of this book it provides a very great insight into the characters and just amazing storytelling.

great story

I know my reviews have been short lately and I'm sorry it's just that covid is somehow still relevant and I got it. Feeling like shit. But this story has been really nice to read while I've been stuck in my bed. And I would read it all again.

love it

I would say it was one of the best stories I read here on inkitt

the story is cool

So I think the story gets an overall five-star experience because I think I love the main character and it's sad. I think I nearly shed a tear reading the third chapter. With that said though the dialogue is weird and I don't like it. I think the dialogue is written poorly because there is a lack of it and what is written doesn't move the story forwards. And there also is a lack of description of characters. You get a huge wide view of their emotions and I would read this story just for how well the author portrays those emotions. But that is why the writing style is getting a four-star and as for grammar and all that dialogue tags could be better used. Especially in that first chapter where a bunch of dead souls is talking to the mc.

Read it all the way

it was a cool ride

coool

the story was cool and definitely should be read.

Great story

The chapters were short and sweet, wish that more world-building happened with a few more detailed descriptions like characters and backgrounds.

scary

I thought the story was good and I hope the author keeps writing.

Amazing story

Great plot

Thumbs up.

wish that there was more action personally but other than that the romance is amazingly portrayed and with no spelling mistakes that I saw.

Sorry

the plot was just not,.. how can,.. Damn okay so the plot is just not inspirational or original, the horror and the female vampire are portrayed poorly and I could get down with the plot or the characters at all. Sorry, everything else is perfect but I just hate the main character and the whole story surrounding them. I hope you keep writing but I just can't point my finger at what was wrong other than the character and the sheer story surrounding them.

rereading now

can't to read the story again it was that good.

dedication

lot of work went into this novel and it was worth it. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Great story

I think others would like this story more then me but I didn't really see any big problems with it.

So much horror

This is a great inspiration for other horror writers. Because you truly know how to set up a plot.

spooky

The story was everything that I hoped it be.

yes

Keep writing and I promise you'll have a reader.

great story

Keep writing the story was amazing.

great start

not a lot to go off of and the story isn't clear because there is only two chapters. With that said though I would read it if there were more. It's interesting to say the least.

Lazy title

When life gives you zombies kill them. Which is a great little segway into what makes up this story. A lot of brain-bashing and emotional nipple-twisting. Found it funny most of the story though. Don't know if that was the goal but that's what it did for me so there's that.

Great

So the cover is to die for. With that said the story has a few grammatical problems but none to big that it takes away focus. Plus fuck commas. Either way the plot is amazing and would read it for the plot alone.

Sad and depressing.

Didn't like the story but I'm sure others would.

Lovely

Amazing concept and a very great story.

great

Maybe a bit cliche an unoriginal but I think the story itself is alright. It works.

Bad ass story

Don't like the cover and that's my only complaint. The story and the mc make this a ride-or-die book and I'm in fully strapped! Loved the action and the plot. Truly felt like I was reading a female Rick Riordan piece. The author gets the feel of what camp half blood is supposed to be with the students and the adventures. Plus being a demi-god is always a great lead for any story. Felt like I was back in highschool.

cap

First I'm not here to bring a story down but you're capitalizing and grammar needs a lot of work. And I'll be happy to point it out if I must but if I do it's going to sound like I'm degrading the story. And I'm not here to do that. I think that story itself is actually unique and I would love to reread it.

Great

It's not a story I would read but I can see a lot of people storming over one another to get this from a Walmart. Soooo pick it up I guess and start reading.

great story

not my thing but overall a good story.

loved the story

The romance plot made me giggle but other than that it was a really fantastic read. Hope the author continues it.

Great

The story had some of the best pacings I've ever seen. With that said thou it has one or spelling mistakes that didn't really hinder me but still feels deserving a docking one star in that department. Either way would recommend people to read it.

great story

Now I know NaNoWriMo is almost half way there and writers are busier than ever. Hell, it was hard finding time to review this story but I can say that it's a huge inspiration. It's written perfectly no flaws in it. Now as for the story I would love to see more before further commenting. But I can see the future in it.

Fast

So because I have over thirty stories to review I'm going a little fast reviewing after three chapters. But I think I can safely say that after reading this story I didn't see any mistakes and the pacing was actually very nice and smooth. I personally like the characters, especially Theos. Couldn't go wrong with this book. Please leave a review, a like, and maybe a comment. So the fast rating is 5,5,4,5

Fast

So based on three chapters I will say that it's very fast-paced and action-packed. I think this book would be better in that genre. But as that is said I think that the pace could be slowed down and that certain details could be stretched out. So the fast rating is 4, 5, 4, 5. Nice score if you ask me. So check out this book and have a nice day.

NaNoWriMo

I wrote this during National Novel Writing Month and appreciate all the feedback that I can. I'm enjoying writing the story so far and hope that others will like reading it as much as I have been writing it. Now it's edited to the best ability. Will try to rework it by the end of the month. Thank you for all of your reviews, comments, and likes on the story.

b story

So imagine a B rated movie but transfer that into pages. It's okay but it's a one time read.

Great story

I never felt such joy reading a story like this one on inkitt. Because it's well written and the story just hits.

Cover to die for

Great story.

Spooky

The story so far is truly terrifying and just coming out of Halloween I'm surprised that this story has little attention. I think it would be great. The only thing that I say that I don't like about it is the cover. But with that opinion out of the way, I truly believe that this story is one that all horror fans would love to read.

Great story

It great story just fix up your grammar and it'll be perfect.

cool

press the enter bar and the whole story is perfect. All of your dialog and paragraphs are stuck together.

Should just stick with matt

Love all the perspectives and the story is really captivating. Now the problem that I got with the book was that the author switches pov with a lot of characters. Should mainly just stick with matt since he's mostly fleshed out and most relatable though.

Great story

The only complaint that I have is that it's a slow burner that doesn't use dialog tags correctly. And with that said pick up the story. I'm sure you'll like maybe.

Sorry for the harshness

so it's a three-star story because there is a lack of emotion within the writing and the plot is heavily overlooked.

Read it liked it

Go and read this story. Sure there are a few misspells and things like that. And sometimes you can't tell who's talking. Wich effected the plot of the story. Either way, check this book out.

Mistakes

So I think that story is alright but there are just mistakes through out it that I didn't really appreciate. The main character was practically mute. And there was little information as to why are what was going on. So yeah four stars all across.

Grand

Great, let's get down to this review!!! So the goal of an evaluation is to inform others why they should or shouldn't pick up said book that you reviewed. With that said let's say why you should. The pros to this book is that the technical side of things the book is perfect. Didn't see any problems, considering most books on inkitt are unedited. Now as for the plot I think the ending for each chapter could have been written better. Plus I don't know if the story is a callback or not. Because it kept switching tenses. With that said though the writing style is great. It's dramatic, to say the least. Which is awesome. Now I wouldn't read this book if you don't like witches or a slightly confusing plot.

Spooky

The story was a tad scary. Which is a good thing. Read this story.

Chaos

So let's get back in the groove of reviews. A review is a person's opinion on the book itself and why people should or shouldn't read the work. And the way I go about reviewing other people's work here on inkitt is that I break it down for each category first and then give my overall.
First of all the plot, was somewhat confusing with a lot of it due to having a melancholy-like character. Who takes the news of being an angel, a divine creature, very well? I think a thing born to believe it's human would be a little freaked out at such news. And then for the same said character to be enveloped in chaos and a very unforgiving world would be a little more "dramatic" and not calm. And let's say the writer was going for calm then I think it was being portrayed poorly. Because the scene, the dialog, and the overall characters in it make it want to feel more dramatic. So with that said the plot itself right felt a little twisted and not exactly on its right path. So I'll give the plot a four-star rating. Because where it was good I think that its message or the overall story just wasn't portrayed well enough to make the plot perfect and less confusing.
The writing style I think the author excels in is deep meanings, symbology, and figurative speech. But emotion manipulation, neatness, or details I think the author lacks those. An example within the book is the overall tone of the main character, the backgrounds half the time weren't clear and it was as if the characters were within a blank canvas. So I'm giving the writing style of the work to be three stars.
And lastly, let's go in at the technical stuff. I hate to demean this work because I think that I would pick it up if it was in a library. And that I would sit down and open it up and read it all day. But there is a couple of misspellings and the author loves his parentheses. Just a tad too much with sometimes leaving the end of parentheses out. So yeah three stars.
so the overall rating of the story is going to be three stars but that doesn't mean one should turn this book away. This book is one for the deep thinker, the one that wants to get lost in the book because it challenges the way you think about people and yourself. But with the fantasy side of it, I think it lacks the emotion necessary to move you to read it for that aspect. So with that pick up The Epitomes because why not.

cool story

Cool story just wasn't my thing.

Great story

1/10 done with it and already I can say that I'm hooked. And I know any reader would be if they checked it out.

Cool

I think that story is great with one problem, the characters are a little stale. But that's it. I would check out this story.

Vamps

Great vampires.

Cool story

I like how everything is written and with it being a decently thick story I found it easy to pick up without judgement. So go and check out this story.

great story

it's a good story

Amazing

So there are a few things to say about this. It's an awesome chick-flick with two very strong and awesome female leads. The plot going up to chapter 5 is awesome. The two sisters Hailey and her younger one (I forget her name so I apologize) are some of the best characters in the story. And the plot only drives them to be better. Just within the first couple of chapters, you are hooked because Hailey is a beast, just an absolute girly girl that can stand up for herself. Mwah. Love it. The plot itself is a five-star for me.
As for writing style, there are a few desperate attempts that the author goes for in terms of emotion. Now, this is just my opinion but there is such a thing as too much emotion. The book really gets drowned out in happiness and a little mellow drama. It's funny sure but I think it could be cut a little less. Either way, I don't think it's worth docking a star. But with that said the author's descriptions are good, her chapters are not too long nor are they too short and it gives off a nice flow. Great.
Okay, this is the part that all authors dread. Technical writing skills. There were a few misspellings. Oh no! Kidding. Well not really. What I mean is not to be dramatic about how little this really matters to me as a reader. Now as a writer this kind of sucked because it got me thinking about how much I needed to edit my stories. But as a reader it really only made me lose focus a couple of times. (Author please go check out chapters 2 & 3) But I'll only dock one star for that.
This story is a 14/15, which is a direct five-star book. Just off of the score alone, the author deserves this rating and I personally thought the story was amazing. So kudos.

YAY

So the plot of the story is really amazing. The author does really well in painting a character and pinning their unique voices to each character. And it reminded me a lot of some of my beginning work. So I had a nostalgic taste in my mouth on top of feeling a new awesome book hit my eyes. It's original and just hits home in the fantasy realm. I hope to see more books like this one hitting Inkitt. So the plot of the story is five stars.
Now on to writing style. The author was very detailed in a lot of spots throughout the book. Maybe too much detail. In this, I mean that the pacing was amazing but every bit of info was just splatted onto the page. leaving too much to the reader. It's a book. Not a movie. You can take time to express your character. Where I do believe that the characters are good all about them kind of just gets spewed all in one chapter. Didn't like this so I'm going to dock a star due to plot dumping. But otherwise, the pace, the vocabulary, and just the overall feeling were great. So four stars.
As we go into the technical stuff I have a few things to say here about this story. One there weren't any spelling errors. I like reading a book without any spelling errors. As for grammar it also didn't skip a beat. But what the author sucks at is they put "continue" at the end of each chapter. Not "to be continued". but I'm not going to dock a star because of that. But I will say that if you can just word "continue differently the end of your books would look a lot better. So five stars.
Meaning your book scored 14/15!!! That means the overall rating is five stars. Because that is what your book is worth. I liked it from the beginning to the end. Keep up writing more chapters. I've added it to my list and am waiting for the next one. Thank you.

Has a good thing going

So the plot right is Sapphire a badass girl that is making her way up the corporate business ladder. Then there is Derrick... He's Derrick. Your general businessman who got too snobbish for his golden Rolex. The plot revolves heavily around these two main characters who eventually meet up. A generic story with a great female lead. Which I think makes it a worthwhile read... If it was just her pov. Instead, the author writes it in a way where it's actually very hard to follow the story and keep your emotions attached to them. It feels heavily rushed. And with Derrick being sort of a useless protagonist. I completely think that 100% of what he does throughout the story could be a subplot or an underlying plot that can be hinted at through Sapphire's eyes. And the story would be better. But as it is right now I'm docking the plot of this story two stars. One for the inconsistent pov, and the other star because I didn't like your characters. And that's something big for any story. If your writing is 5/5. and your grammar is 5/5, and your backgrounds are 5/5, but your characters are a 1/5 then your story no longer is readable. Imagine if Harry Potter was a terrible character that we got very little detail on. Then that series wouldn't even be known. Because as readers we like characters over almost anything. So for the plot, I'm saying it's a three-star at best.
Writing style, as I've mentioned above you rush your story switching back and forth between Saphire and Derrick. So it's rushed, unedited, and does a meh job on the background. Now what you excel in is dialog. Even though the dialog tags are all wrong and messed up the actual wording had their voices. Like it was unique and their conversations and chats were interesting. But that's as far as the compliment goes. So docking a star. Four stars for writing style.
Okay, now we get to the technical stuff. The author doesn't capitalize, names, or places, and the worse sin amongst writers is that she doesn't capitalize their "i"s. That's a few problems right there that will be docking two stars from. Then there was a few wording problems with the story that just wrecked a chapter or two. docking another star for that. So technical writing skills are a two-star.
So the overall rating is 9/15. Ugh! That sounds so mean. When the story wasn't bad for a romance. The story was really cute just not rolled out well. And the biggest problem that the story faces is that technical bit. That's what is heavily affecting the score. Sure there is the plot, right? Yes, I do believe what I said when I said the plot was rushed and the characters, not even a dash relatable, or not even being able to connect with them because the author switches back and forth between the two of them. But if you love a female lead that kicks ass then this is totally a book that you should check out. And I wouldn't stop you. But with that being the score it's a low D at best. This means the overall rating for the book would be 2 stars. No hate, I left comments on what could be done to fix these and left over more than five constructive suggestions to better the story. The writer knows how to write a strong female lead. And they should lean more into that than this.

Deep but edit

So how I do reviews is I go by the three main ratings and then add them all up to see what the total is. Because I think it's fair. And as for the plot of the story, I read up to chapter five. At this point in time, the story is at nine chapters. So reading over half of the novel and getting a good chunk out of it I can say a few things about it. First off the plot is okay. I think it just hits a few rough patches with delivery. Because the mood shifts from box, melancholy, romantical, drama, but never stays in it so long to bask in it. See the characters are good, the description of the background is meh, and for dialog, I think that it could be spruced up. Just to make it more emotional and dramatic. So as far as the plot goes it's very box-like and only really brings out emotion once in a while. Not very hooking to say the least. But the story itself from what I gathered is four people, all lovers to be, there's one that's a stubborn jackass but a sweet heart beneath it all, the other is a leader that once had a golden heart but had it crushed very very early, and two other women that I can't remember their names. But they were cute from what I remember with their interaction with the other cast. So for the plot, I'm docking two stars, because the main problem that the plot has it that theirs, is not a lot of emotion to connect to. Bearly enough to make it bearable to read, but not enough that it hooks and drags me through the pages. And as for the other reason is that along with little to no emotion the descriptions were meh at best. Not ever painting a clear picture for my mind. So three stars for the plot. #3
Now for writing style, I've mentioned that it's a very box-like way of writing. Very blunt tries to use emotion but fail. I think the author was trying their best to make it where we try to focus on the characters more than their surroundings and that's fine but not for this book. Like I'm not the author or the one that had this idea. So it's kind of harsh to say that bit. But there is a reason why authors go ass over the mouth with details in even the simplest kitchen. Because it paints an image that can sway audiences. And this fails to do that. It wants you to just picture the characters and that's fine too. It's not like it hasn't been done before. For instance, Wereworld by Curtis Jobling mainly focuses on the characters and very little background detail. But it's a fantasy action. Which is why that works. Because a battle scene is already a very clear picture in the reader's mind. So you don't have to go very detailed and can focus that detail on the characters. But for a story of this category, it just fails. So I'm docking two stars. Making the total for writing style down to a three.
Okay so last but not least technical writing skills. I'm glad to say that there were no spelling errors, no formatting errors, and the wording of sentences couldn't be better. The book excels in this with amazing grammar and spelling. And it deserves the five stars here. I just want to note that I'm not trying to be harsh. I did think that the content of the story could be great, it just was bland and very blunt in the details. Leaving very little or too much imagination for the reader.
But the story "The Rest Of Heaven" written by "Aquiteplace." (Sorry if I butchered it) is a story that shows struggle, and a melancholy plot as our heroes venture out into their world. I did look at the other reviews and saw that they were all five stars and said that they had terrific poetic structure and that the characters were cleverly plotted throughout the story. And that's cool. This review is mainly my opinion not meant to troll. Just a perspective. And my view was that the story was bland for a fantasy adventure novel to be. But I think you as a reader should strive to see the book for yourself and make your own opinion. But 11/15 is somewhere around a high C or a low B. And giving the story a benefit of the doubt I'll give it an overall rating of 4/5. Congratulations author.

Great sex

Great sex scenes. Funny too.

great

great story

Beryl

So since the book is five chapters I can give somewhat opinions on the plot. Coming straight off the fifth chapter I can say that the drama romance that you will want to read has everything that one could want. Imagine Riverdale and Blue Bloods had a crossover. That explains the plot of the movie nearly to a T. And those are amazing shows known for their great story. Beryle gets five stars for plot and writing style as she makes it feel satisfying to complete each chapter and gives us a clever cliffhanger to end each chapter. Excellent writing. Now as for the technical stuff there were a few misspelled words. But not enough to deter the reader (me). So four stars for that one. You should read Beryle from Lyriccoffee because if you like drama, murder mystery, and romance then this is the book that you should pick up. Over all rating five stars.

Great story

The only complaint that I have is that it's very melodramatic. But that's all.

funny

The entire story is funny and great to read.

coolio

read up to chapter five have to say go for it. Read it till your heart stops.

coolio

listen I'm tired. Your story is very mild in terms of story writing, formatting, and just overall romance. And that is my opinion so sorry if you get a little salt in your feelings. But I hope others read this story. Have a nice day.

Awesome

So the story is three chapters long I wasn't able to get anything really. The main character is dangerous and gives off a trickster character vibe. This is cool but we don't really get to see any erotica elements like there's no spice yet (Most erotica can be anywhere from 10% or 40% sex scene) but that's not a terrible thing. It's a very slow-paced novel with romance and bad boys being heavy. So with that the plot I'm going to give a four because we haven't seen elements of the story that I think is necessary, Then it comes to writing style and I think the author is very descriptive and allows a great imaginative flow to give the reader a sense of a romance blossoming from what could be a very toxic relationship. So five stars for writing style. As for grammar, there were a few words that weren't capitalized. Plus the formatting of the story is I think poor. Like each paragraph is unusually spaced out. But I'll only drop one star because I've seen other stories struggle with this and it might just be inkitt acting up.
So the overall score is 13/15 and I'll be a bit biased here and give praise where it is due. I hate romance stories. I think they're rotten and overdone as you have to see it as a subplot or just about anything that would allow it into any type of story nowadays. But that's my opinion on the entire genre. Now this book in particular I see potential in it. The descriptions are clever and clear, It's like watching a very short film in my head. And I could get into this one as it's pulling originality out of its butt and delivers what most romance can't. An unpredictable story. So I'm going to give Fire Meets Gasoline 5/5 stars. Hope the author keeps on writing.

Cool

lovely and cool but can get boring at times and has grammar to fix up.

hot

hot and steamy!!!

spooky

So going off of two chapters I have to say this is going to be a very short story. Like I'm talking about there not possibly being any more than three more chapters coming. The pace of the story is very fast and you just don't get the connection needed for the suspense. So how I go about rating stories is I just go about it one thing at a time. So the plot of the story is short so I can't go full on it but to water it down big bad monster, a little frightened girl in the mountains. And the idea right is kind of stale like bread. It's been done before, written nearly like any other story like it, except that you try to exploit emotion through the damage of a family pet. Which is effective but makes the story feel like the dog was the only thing that we had emotionally invested in. So I think I'm going to dock the plot down two stars and the writing style one star.
As we head into judging the author's writing style keep in mind that I'm not saying don't read this story. I think that it's a decent two chapters and I have no idea what is going to happen next. The author could come out and surprise me and show me how she'll turn this generic book into something original and terrifying. But as her writing style goes I think that the author chooses a very lax way of writing, like not wanting to invade the reader's mind with description and allow the reader themselves to fill in holes. Like it can work. Especially in a horror-type setting. But it makes this story just feel truly unfinished (Which it is and I have kept that in mind) and like the author means to come back to these chapters and fill it up more. Which is good if they do decide to do that. But I think for this reason I'll dock writing style another star.
Now we get to the final rating and I honestly think the only thing that's wrong is the formatting. Every sentence and paragraph is spaced out heavily. But as for spelling and grammar, I think that author had no problems with them. And there must give that five whole stars. Because I didn't see a problem at all and it didn't disrupt the flow of the writing itself.
So the overall score would be 11/15 which would be around the low C area. And therefore I'm going to give the overall rating 3/5 stars. Because of the lack of creative talent, the very lazy writing style was just a no-go. I think that yes while you could maybe hook your readers you won't be able to keep them there for long. There was a heavy lack of description of both character and background. I couldn't connect with it and I'm sorry. I think that people should read it because it has the potential to be more. As I stated I am only two chapters in not giving me a lot of ground to work with in the first place. And with only there being two chapters I can't really review it. It's like telling a baby that they're already a failure even though they haven't done anything yet. And so if I was a random person scrolling through inkitt and saw this book I would add it to my "to be read" list and then wait as more chapters come by. Because all I really know is that there is just more to be read than what meets the eye as of right now.

The Runaway

So it's a good story and coming from someone who doesn't like werewolf books because they're cheesy and easily predictable by a mile, and overused, and,.. either way, I love this story even though it's short right now. But it has enough chapters to review so let me give you reasons why you should pick up this story. So the book itself let's rate this as we go. So the plot of the story didn't have any kinks in it and is able to portray a relatable and conflicted character named Olivia in the first three chapters we get to see her home life, her romance that cannot be because of mental and social reasonings. The werewolf bit is not very important so it comes off as a drama almost which I can't complain about. I love a good romance drama. Now I know that it's a romantic action but I haven't been able to see any "action". So I think because I haven't been able to see an important element of the plot I'll dock it a star.
Now as in writing style the narration is great and the way the author writes dialog is really to be jealous over. I thought I was reading the works of Stephenie Meyer. Now I think backgrounds could be described a bit more. The character portion is amazing with the background kind of being a blurry image. So I'll dock a star for that.
Okay, now we get to the "final" judgment if that is what you would like to call it. And it is very straightforward. Now as a person who sucks with punctuation and really just hopes to god that Grammarly catches it and fixes it for me I would say that the punctuation and spelling for this story are really good. As for grammar which includes the previous two I think that the author does good on that and I couldn't see anything wrong so five stars.

So 13/15 stars equal up to a rating of 86% and in school that would be a low A or a high B. But this isn't school. lol. And I think that a genuine five-star overall rating is fair. I can see a young to teenage area loving this book checking it out and just reading the hell out of it. It has relatable characters, is nicely edited, can be read smoothly, and the emotion hits harder than Ali Jr. But what I think makes this book personally good to me is that it connects with me and gets me to think. I loved the overall experience of reading this story for what it has.

Great story.

So the author is clever and the story is very good once you delve four chapters into it, very long chapters that I think could have been split up into at least two or three chapters by themselves individually. And they have a consistency to brick together dialog with the story making it look like a brick of words. Like the first two paragraphs, then it gets better to read in the third and fifth paragraphs, only to revert to the bricks in the seventh and tenth paragraphs. And I don't know if it's me but with those very long chapters and to just power through it and read it was a bore. Like I don't think I remember a spelling mistake so great for the author. The formatting is terrible for the reasons I've already mentioned. Okay and now for the story right,.. I got a lot from the first chapter, made the whole thing feel like an info dump after an info dump with every character's backstory and life. Like we as readers or just simply I as a reader don't need to know this unless there is going to be an easter egg of this info in later chapters. And in that case, let that easter egg show those characters' backstories instead of just info dumping it in the first chapter. It just slows down the story to a snore pace.

5

So the story was good, except for the prolog everything was incredibly spelled and punctuated. And as the story goes I think that I didn't read far enough because around chapter 3 he gets a text and has to go play the role of captain save a hoe. And that is where I left. One because it didn't hook me and two wasn't my kind of story. But because of those two personal reasons, I'm not going to give fewer stars.

Great read

Great story I would read it again. 😎👍

Would read it

The writer is talented and I think that this story can go somewhere. So yeah 5/5

Great

So even though I liked the characters and the setting I have to say that there was a lack of pull or hook that would make me want to continue reading. And then there's the question would I reread it? And the answer to that question is no. I wouldn't want to reread it and I think that there is no hooking bit in this story. With that said though I did read through what was there and thought this is an alright story. I would check it out of a library for sure.

Great plot

I'm just going to let the stars explain themselves. The story was alright and I would continue to read it though.

Great story

So I recommend just to keep writing. The story is a mystery to me because it only has been one chapter so far and there's simply not enough to judge.

Great

Liked the story

Anya

So the thing that I liked most about this book was the author's character Anya because the author made her feel like a real person. Now I would say a lot of authors struggle with getting their characters to have their own unique voices but Simran Kaur Malhotra didn't struggle with this. Her dialogue between characters is amazing. I could be absorbed into the story and kept there comfortably. I hope that they will continue writing as the book is only in its tenth chapter and I could have honestly continued reading.

Great

The idea of the book was solid. I liked it.

five

Great,... great,.. good story,.. I'll be honest and say I only read up to chapter five and saw no problems with it. I think some words were used in repetition and that the book didn't connect with me. And before someone says something like "you're a guy who only likes action fantasy" my favorite series in the whole world is WereWorld by Curtis Jobling and my favorite stand-alone is Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde. And I think that this book is good, it has werewolves, cursing, and is full of drama. But I read five chapters and it didn't stick. So give it a try and see if it's the book that you've been looking for.

Great

au revior. The story is alright I didn't like it. But no mistakes in the writing and I'm sure someone else will like it. The Turn I don't understand the premise nor did I understand the point of the story. Couldn't get into it and so I think others can tell me that I'm wrong.

Great

It's a powerful story about a girl who is deaf, which is a clever play on the title. I think that author did a great job writing this story and I can't wait to read more. Like I'm on chapter 8 and I just have to say it was very emotional and,.. I can't wait to read more.

Great short story

I'll be honest and say that this story had a few elements from every genre. And that kind of made the flow not concise. Plus with it being so short I think there were just a couple of knots of the story that didn't tie well at the end. Like so many questions left to be answered and feel like the book just had more to offer. But with what is there I think it's light and easy to read to five stars for the short story.

Weird

It was just weirdly written. Like it reminded me of a book/script for a play. Like a script for a play that was attempted to be transferred to a book adaptation. But getting cut off halfway through the transition. Like the story is not bad, kind of bland and I think could definitely be picked up on the pace, the main character pov is great but she could maybe use a boost with just her being the main character Like she as a high school student should be more dramatic and less realistic. Especially in a book. Like high school students are always pretty dramatic. And not being a troll or anything. I hope to god I'm not coming off rude. See I gave a reason why the plot was a three and why the writing style was a three. Now as for punctuation and grammar I have to tell you it chalks up to the story being weirdly formatted in the way it is. For instance, the dialog tags are what they are. Like the mention of the character, then in bold and in quotation marks is what they say. It's weird because that's not how I was taught to write,.. And if this is just how this author was taught to write dialog then I guess I'll change the rating. But if that's not the case then I'm sorry it's wrong.

One chapter

Not much to go off. One chapter wonder. It was good but not enough to go off on. So four star? Like I'm sure the book will be a five-star but right now it's just not there to be judged.

Amazing

I like that the author is talented and the book was free! It was cool to see and read all the characters feeling themselves and get this,.. Reading an actual good sex scene. Like I just got done reading the most horrendous sex scene and it was just like downing a whole bottle of painkillers. Terrible and pointless. But this book was just so good at the descriptions and the emotion behind it.