Onyx_Quill

An aspiring author with a love for words, stories, and anything fictional. Note: I don't read or review anything rated 18+.

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Calypso

This story starts right in the middle of the action, hooking readers in. Instantly, I knew I would like each of the characters, especially Calypso, the protagonist. She has a sort of anti-hero feel to her that’s engaging and refreshing. The dialogue and character interactions were both compelling and entertaining. Each character had a distinct voice and way of talking, which I really enjoyed.
I felt that the beginning of the book was a tad bit rushed, and would have liked it if the context of the world was mentioned a bit earlier. But at the same time, those things kept me curious as I continued to read, so it’s fine the way it is.
Great work! Definitely worth a read.

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The War

In just two chapters, the author has managed to catch my attention completely. I found myself fully invested in the story and characters. The writing is beautiful, emotionally powerful, and flows wonderfully. I especially loved Camilla’s writings – they’re so imaginative and poetic. At times, the transitions between scenes can feel a bit sudden, but that’s honestly the only criticism I have. I can’t wait to see where the story goes.

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Fascinating and Beautifully Written

A wonderful novel for any fan of science fiction. The writing itself is amazing. It’s beautiful, intelligent, and very thorough - especially the character descriptions, which are incredibly detailed and paint a clear image of each character.
The world and atmosphere are amazingly detailed and immersive. I especially liked the technology. Sometimes it felt that large chunks of the universe’s history were being explained through monologue, but it didn’t really distract from the story itself, and was altogether very interesting.
It’s clear that a lot of thought and care went into this. The author has an amazing talent.

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Thrilling and Captivating

There's not that much to go off of so far, but from what I've seen, this story definitely has potential. The plot is intriguing, and the protagonist seems unique and likable, with captivating struggles.

At times, the writing felt a but muddled. I'd suggest clarifying what's actually happening in the scene in chapter one. Also (this is really just a suggestion), you might want to edit the prologue or the summary, so they're not the same. Them being identical lessened the tension a bit for me.

A great start! I'd definitely be interested in following this story.

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The Arrangement

Looks good so far! I love the entire bright, sort of cheerful feeling this story has (or at least that's what I felt while reading it). The grammar is actually very good - I didn't find any mistakes while reading. The plot itself looks promising. I think that the writing itself could use a bit more expansion, especially with emotions and setting, but otherwise, there's not much else to suggest. Keep up the good work!

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Gangsta

This looks promising! The plot and overall idea are unique and fresh. Ruby, the protagonist, is full of personality - same with the side characters. I'm very interested to see how the plot plays out.
As far as critique and suggestions go, I would have liked the characters and plot to have been introduced a bit more naturally. Maybe try to use the "show, don't tell" method? Also, it would have been interesting to learn about the world this story takes place in - however, with it being so early in the story, this issue will probably fix itself as the plot goes on..
Lots of potential! I'm very curious to see what happens next.

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The Book of Trials

A wonderfully written book, with a thrilling plot and a great protagonist. The writing is amazing, giving readers a clear image of the settings and characters. I personally loved the protagonist, Veia - she's relatable, full of personality, and carries a sense of depth that grabbed my attention from chapter one. I really enjoyed this, and can’t wait to see more from this author!

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Suspenseful and Intriguing

I really enjoyed this! The sense of suspense and mystery kept me hooked with every new story. As far as critique goes, I noticed a few grammar mistakes, and thought that writing could be a bit more fleshed out. Some of the scenes and explanations felt a bit vague, but that also added a sense of mystery to them, so it's perfectly fine. All in all, some really great short stories, filled with horror and suspense.

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Amazing Start!

This book immediately grabbed my attention. The descriptive writing, realistic dialogue, and breathless action scenes are entertaining and gripping. The feeling that none of Sylvia’s companions can be trusted creates a constant feeling of tension that makes me want to keep reading (I personally love that sort of thing in a book). From what I’ve seen of the setting so far, this book’s world looks like it will be unique, colorful, and exciting – I’m interesting in exploring it more as the story progresses.
My only suggestion right now would be to consider starting the story a bit earlier. I felt that things might have felt a bit more complete if there had been more time spent introducing the characters and the situation before the action started. This is just a suggestion, though – the story won’t suffer if you choose to keep like it is. :)
Awesome work! I’m can’t wait to see what happens next.

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Intriguing

I'm blown away by how beautiful and eloquent the writing in this story its. It reads almost like poetry, and is both beautiful and chilling. What makes this particular story stand out is that there isn't an obvious, physical "plot". Instead, the story reads more along the lines of a stream of consciousness, guiding the reader through the narrative. Truly unique - great work.

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Ethereal and Captivating

"Is Anybody Out There?" provides readers with an emotional, wonderfully-written story that's short and to the point. The writing presents the emotion in such a raw and clear way, that it's impossible not to get invested in the story. The sensation of complete loneliness was brilliantly demonstrated; throughout the entire story, I could feel the sensation of solitude growing, along with the character's despair.
Overall, a skillfully written and thought-provoking story. I'd definitely recommend checking it out!

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Simply Amazing

I’m being completely honest when I say that this is one of the best books that I’ve read on Inkitt so far. I don’t usually read zombie-related stories, but “The Last of 2100” is just so unique from other books of this genre. Instead of going for the usual post-apocalyptic vibe, these first few chapters have taken on a sci-fi-like setting that's original and unique – I love it!
The writing style is simply amazing; I found myself completely absorbed in the story, settings, and plot. The voice of the two characters who’ve been introduced so far are distinct and clear. I could practically feel their emotions as I read.
At the moment, I have no suggestions, except that I agree with what Thorns_or_Roses mentioned about the character introductions in the beginning. Other than that, just continue what you’re doing – it’s perfect.

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Blinding Light

Mysterious and exciting! It kept me guessing with every chapter – every time I thought I had something figured out, something else is thrown at me that made me question everything. I loved the time jumps, especially when the story switched from the mysterious and seemingly peaceful setting, to the bloody and tense “present time” setting. There are a few grammar errors scattered throughout the book, and some of the sentences could use a bit of work, but I know that the book is currently under editing, so I’m sure they’ll get fixed with time. :)

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Regrets

Great start! Right from the beginning, I could really hear the character's voice and see their personality. There’s some great groundwork for future chapters, and the writing is full of emotion. Maybe add some more details, though, especially in the flashbacks. Some of the scenes so far seem to move very quickly.
Nevertheless, the majority of the story so far – the thoughts – show more than enough potential. I’d definitely be interested in seeing what happens next!

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Captivating

I love the slow-building plot and mystery in this novel. The plot is intriguing and very unique. The characters are all relatable, with distinct, likeable personalities. I love how the plot slowly builds, dropping hints of what’s to come and creating a sense of suspense as the book goes on. As for the writing itself, it was very detailed and clear.
As for suggestions, I felt that it might be a good idea to use the "show, don't tell" method for some of the backstory, settings, and details (mainly in the first portion of the novel). I also felt that there could have been a bit more emotion in the narrative. Nevertheless, I enjoyed reading this! I'm curious to see what happens next.

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Girl In Pain

I love the raw emotion in this book. The plot and the characters are believable, with a great sense of conflict to them all (especially the protagonist). I personally love the author's writing style; it's beautiful and descriptive, reading almost like poetry. The entire story is full of emotion, and the mystery surrounding the protagonist's past is very compelling.
Definitely worth a read!

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Gripping!

This book had me at the edge of my seat. It was thrilling and mysterious, giving readers little pieces of information and slowly drawing them in. I was hooked from the first sentence. At this point, I think the only issue is the grammar and frequent typos, which sort of distracted from the story. However, the writing itself was very good, and the book as a whole was fascinating and exciting.
Keep up the good work!

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Very promising!

So far, this book is great. I particularly like the struggles of the individual characters. The entire cast, including side characters, are filled with personality and charm. I also love how the plot slowly unfolds with an overall sense of mystery.

It seemed to me that the main characters often acted a bit too mature for their ages - maybe you could make them a tad older? It's not a huge issue, just something I noticed.

Just a quick suggestion: You might want to put a trigger/content warning in your summary, regarding the events of chapter 4 - some people might find that kind of thing upsetting.

Great work! I'm excited to see what comes next.

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A Tense and Exciting Short Story

This is an amazing short story, Tension is held until the final sentence as readers slowly learn the plot. The author gave enough information to guide readers in the right direction while leaving some things to the imagination. I’m amazed at how there managed to be actual character development in such a short piece. The woman's inner turmoil about her actions is particularly well done.

All in all, this is a great story with amazing writing, intriguing characters, and a gasp-worthy ending.

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