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Mémoires souillées
"Franchement ! J'ai beaucoup aimé l'histoire du début jusqu'à la fin. Merci à l'auteur. "
Evil plot uncovered, couldn’t stop reading
"Good writing and captivating story. Can’t wait for more 🤩"
Never disappoints
"Loved this one, I actually gasped when we find out! Enjoyed it immensely "
CHAPTER 1 REVIEW
"CHAPTER 1 Plot Clarity & Pacing The Hook: The opening scene with the bracelet is excellent. It immediately establishes the social hierarchy (Shifters vs. Humans) and Tina’s invisibility without needing a long info-dump. The Shift in Stakes: The story moves quickly from a routine workday to a high-stakes escape. The transition from cleaning a room to stealing a car feels earned because of her fear of the "migraines" and the police. Information Flow: You’ve woven her backstory (the motel 4 years ago, the restaurant job) into the present action well. It doesn’t feel like the story stops for a history lesson; rather, it feels like she is weighing her past as she plans her future. The Car Theft: One small point of confusion: She considers stealing Peter’s truck because the keys are in it, but then tries a random Mini and finds the keys under the visor. It feels a bit too lucky that two vehicles in the same lot were so easily accessible. Character Development & Relatability Tina’s Voice: She feels weary but resourceful. Her "misdemeanor" logic (stealing to survive) makes her very relatable. She isn’t a "bad" person; she’s a person the world has forgotten. The Mystery of "Tina": The detail about her name "feeling wrong" is a fantastic hook. It creates an immediate bond between the reader and the protagonist because we are both searching for her identity. Competence vs. Vulnerability: I like the contrast between her being able to drive and navigate the world, yet being completely sidelined by these neurological events. It makes her feel capable but humanly fragile. Emotional Engagement Isolation: The most poignant part of this chapter is her loneliness, the fact that she’s been "missing" for four years and no one is looking for her. The scene where she describes herself as an "empty vessel" or a "mannequin" is very evocative. The Migraine: You’ve described the physical pain effectively. As a reader, I felt the urgency for her to find a safe spot. The fear that she might wake up and not even remember her (possibly fake) name adds a layer of psychological horror that kept me engaged. Structural Integrity The World Building: The hierarchy is clear. Shifters are the elite/aggressive class, and humans are the disposable labor. The "nostril flaring" detail by the wolf husband was a great "show, don't tell" for how they perceive humans (perhaps by scent). POV Consistency: The internal monologue stays consistent. We see the world through the lens of someone who is used to being looked down upon. The Ending: The chapter ends on a solid cliffhanger. She is unconscious, in a stolen car, on the side of a road in a forest, in a world where she is already a fugitive. This is a "page-turner" moment. Strengths & Weak Areas Strengths: The Mystery: The "blank canvas" backstory is very compelling. The Stakes: You’ve managed to make a "migraine" feel as dangerous as a villain with a gun. Atmosphere: The transition from the dingy hotel to the dark, cold forest creates a great sense of isolation. Weak Areas: The Convenience of the Mini: As mentioned, finding the keys in the visor of the second car she tried felt a little "easy" for a world that has been so cruel to her otherwise. The "Instructions": She mentions instructions to "wait" in the motel 4 years ago. It might be helpful to know if those instructions were written or verbal, as it’s a key piece of her only lead. Timeline: She says she’s been in the city too long and the police have her on their radar, but she’s currently serving community service for the police. It’s slightly confusing why she is fleeing the police now specifically, is it just the fear of the next arrest, or did she break a specific rule of her probation? This story has a lot of promise, and I’d be happy to share more in-depth feedback if you’re interested. You can reach me easily through the email icon on my profile."
Susiebear
"What can I say,what a great read a very indepth story line full of caractors,I'd like to know more about Janie and stich.and what happend after Tamara berries her parents clothes it was a little jarring at the end there,but I loved it got sucked in.many thanks and well done 💕"
Epic story!
"Such a unique story with depth of characters, plots within plots, and a main character that I was rooting for the whole way. I was on the edge of my seat and couldn't put it down. I highly recommend this book. "
Llorando
"Probablemente una de las mejores historias de lobos que leí. Si hay otra mejor, también es tuya"
Tainted memories
"Great story. Many heartbreaking and shocking scenes. I love that Ian got a second chance mate, and also who she is - they both deserve a 2nd chance. Everything worked out well in the end. Well done "
Worth reading and highly recommended
"Been seeing this book for ages but didn't bother to read it. I read the author's other books. But am glad I did read it. It's just wow! The suspense and the thought of who is behind, who is the traitor etc. This book is unpredictable you'll never know until you reach the end. Worth reading. Highly recommended! "
I 😍
"This book was impressive. I like how the author manages to put everything together in there. I cannot stop reading all to the end. I really liked it, thanks for letting us know this history.🙏🏻😊"
Excellent Plot
"This book had very believable characters with an action ridden plot. The read was eventful and smooth. 5 stars "
Great read
"Fucking fantastic read! Finish it in 2 days, couldnt put it down. Definitely qualifies as a page turner."
Definitely Good Read
"Another amazing story by incredible writer good and different plot not the typical mature writing definitely a good read 💯"
Tainted memories
"Wow!! Love it!! Great read!! Thank you for sharing your story with me "
Tainted memories
"After a long time , i found out this amazing book which keeps you captivated till the end. Well knit plot is the best thing about it. I loved it thoroughly. Best of luck to the author for future endeavours."
Review
"A compelling plot, interesting to the end"
surprisingly good
"When I read the preview I did’nt think I was going to like it. But to my surprice this is a really well writting story and it holds you to it with its mysteries. "
Tainted memories
"OMG... WOW...this book was so astonishing and well worth for anybody to read. It was so amazing I couldn't put it down. With the end of each chapter I couldn't stop reading...I had to keep going. It definitely keep me on my toes. I loved every bit of it from beginning to end. Amazing job writing this."
Tracey
"Wow another amazing story your such a wonderful writer I’ve read a lot of your books there just so good"
Loved it
"Loved this story. I’ve been reading this author’s different books and so far all have been great! I have a few left and I’m looking forward to reading them."
