"Serving Love"

"Adelina, congrats on your submission to Inkitt.........you are now an Author....... The young attorney Olivia, has been given her first murder case. She attends a hearing in Court to set the plea and date for trial. The Defendant in this new case see's Olivia in Court, He has feelings for her. Upon Leaving Court, Olivia Finds that she has parked her car next to the Defendants MotorBike, She is pinned against her car by the man, The Defendant, in her upcoming case, which she will fight in Court to put Him in Jail for Murder. In the mind of this Man, he wants her to believe he is innocent.......yet follow.......... The STory is a bit slow pace, mixed with the use of 1st person discussion and 3rd person discussion, and intermixed at times too.........you might try an old trick by taking your story and reading it out loud to yourself and then catching any errors or confusing sentences that might be confusing.. Kind of an editing process that could help your in your story line and plot Punctuation and Grammar are always an issue for all of us, you are not alone............ keep up your writing and be the one of the first to become a best seller.............cudos........... william elliott kern"