What is your opinion?
Loved it
"This story is different and I loved it"
The Em
"I love the idea and the storyline behind it but it was really hard to keep up with when it's all in the same paragraph. I would make shorter paragraphs especially between dialogue so it's easier to keep up with the storyline. I can't wait for updates to see what you do with it :)"
I like it
"I like the idea of the plot, having something that attacks the village but having never seen it. I do think that there are some grammar, spelling and structure issues. The paragraphs are not spaced correctly so it makes it difficult to read. The sentences are too long because of the way your commas are added so it drags on. I think making the sentences simple or compound would be a better choice. You also switch the structure of the words like “run lock and your door” instead of “run inside and lock your door”. But it’s not a horrible book, I think if you edit and read it out loud you can see the inconsistencies. I think it’s a great effort and has potential."
