What is your opinion?
Nice and can be improved
"You have nice narratives and nice descriptions. The topic you are writing about and the idea you have require dynamics, excitement; and your story lacks a bit in that so far. I would suggest that you maybe add some dialogues, monologues or the characters’ thoughts throughout the story. In my opinion, that would be even more interesting and it would make the reader a bit more engaged and willing to keep on reading. There is no doubt that you have a writing talent, but I think you can do better if you make the story a bit more thrilling, exciting and dynamic. That is what your idea is about, at the first place. If putting aside this little suggestion, I have really enjoyed reading this so far and I’d love to read the rest."
The Shrug Of The Hamadryad
"Not that bad. It’s passable. Decent at best. Of course, that’s all in comparison to ”Why Money Wants To Kill Me”. Don’t read that, please. So, basically I’m saying that it’s awful. But it’s far better than the other one. Amateur writer, it’s the best he can do. "
