What is your opinion?
Great story, but rushed at the end
"Great description of the party! You gave me a clear picture of that...and of the protagonist...right off the bat. Although he was not a very nice person, I liked him. The interaction between him and the ninja was very funny, and I liked the way things ended up. It seemed very unique. However, I thought the ending, after Chris died, was a little rushed. And it seemed like you defaulted to telling rather than showing. But other than that, I really liked this story. Good luck in the contest!"
A little unexpected
"When I first started reading this, I was actually expecting Chris to be a killer on the lookout for a new victim and the story would end with him getting a potential victim and it did look like that at first. However I was pleasantly surprised to see that it didn't turn out that way and he ended up getting punished for a previous crime. Overall, I enjoyed reading this. By the way Chris was described he seemed like your average womanizer but this was turned a little sour when the ninja alluded to her employer and her purpose for being at the party. Your descriptions of the characters and their surroundings make it easy to visualize what they look like and is going on as well. Great work."
