Looks promising

"It is only my opinion, but.... You have most of the basics for a good story. Your storyline is interesting, you have a nice cast of characters who are not just black and white. They're human and I think you're very close to bringing them alive. I'm excited to see where this story is going. Sage's diary entries remind me of the notes from the criminals in Camilla Läckbergs books or the end of chapter messages in Cecily von Ziegesars books. I mean that in a positive way. I do still have some remarks I like this story overall, but I feel like the separate chapters aren't linked together enough. I'd like to see more depth in the main characters (Sage and Jacob). Anthony is probably going to need a little more screen time because he's caught in the middle of the issue. Overall I think if it's fully written, you will have a great book that you should be proud of."