What is your opinion?
Great Book!
"This book is amazing, and I loved it! The only suggestions I have is to make more dialogue, and to write more about Xia, and about her personality, family, and history. Otherwise, this book is fabulous and I would recommend it to everyone!"
Original
"The way this story was written was new, original. It was written in the form of a message to a dystopian world. Usually, I don't enjoy such plots, but I liked this story. It was short, fun, interesting. New. Occasionally, there was a mistake here and there, or an awkwardly phrased sentence. But this story marks an interesting theme: perfection, and was a very enjoyable read."
Wow! :)
"My only advice is to bookmark either www.grammarcheck.net or www.spellcheck-online.com. They help me. :)"
Different!
"I think the plot is unique. Although I can not really differentiate between the protagonist and the antagonist. The book looks promising and there is a lot to be said."
Great start
"I really like the teasers planted... it leaves the reader wanting to know more and I look forward to hearing more about "exhuman". The beginning is an interesting way to tell the story and creative, but I would love to be grounded in more details of the setting- the words by the speaker are powerful and interesting, but I need more grounding to begin the story."
Work in Progress
"I am not 100% certain what direction this book will go based on these two chapters alone so take my criticism with a grain of salt. To begin, the plot of the story concerning evolved humans at war with each other is rather interesting. The creature in the depths gave off sort of an old god feel with room to elaborate. You can go in many different directions with this so have fun. The writing style however I was not a big fan of. Granted take what I say lightly since I do not know what your intentions are for this work. But If you are going to use a first person perspective be sure to ease the transition between the first person plural and singular (as in we verses me for example.) Be sure to understand the pros and cons of using this perspective and write accordingly. First person allows for a more intimate portrayal of the characters emotions that you don't see often. I would love to see how this story reads if you emphasized with this Xia character and bring out the colors of what she is truly feeling. Another bit of advice I would offer is show vs tell. When writing don;t simply say ( x happens ) instead say ( y is happening thus x happens.) Another example would be ( I swam away in fear hoping to survive the dire situation ) instead use ( I was so scared my legs began to go numb and my senses dreary as I swam away) small things like that bring the world to life and make the characters feel real. Last bit of advice I can offer is story pacing. I do not know your whole intentions for the book either short story or novel I would recommend expanding on the universe in general and give more intimate details. Do these little things and I think you have the working of a good book. Best of luck to you !"
