What is your opinion?
Great premise
"The premise is very relatable to the current times. Health issues especially mental health issues are rampant, so seemingly to address both in a story is relatable to many. There are a lot of misspellings & grammatical errors but that’s easy to fix. The framework is there, would love a stronger obstacle than an unbreakable door as the plot barrier. Maybe no door is needed tbh. You already have the ingredients for a compelling story, sometimes this door takes away from the main aroma. Relationships, physical & mental health, god, fear, coming to grips w/ real life issues...its all there to work with creatively & impactfully. Thanks for sharing, look forward to read more..."
I've Seen Worse
"The author's passion and desire is unquestionable; but as a reader I want to be drawn into a story, and the near-constant grammatical and punctuation issues were like constant light smacks to the face. Eventually I just couldn't continue. Which is unfortunate; there is a good story here, begging for the necessary attention to detail. Please keep writing!"
It's a Start
"I'm going to be honest, I had a very difficult time reading this due to all the errors in basic writing skills. (capitalization, punctuation, formatting) I realize some writers are so eager to put there wonderful stories up, that they don't proof. It detracts so much from the story, which I think could be developed into something good, that it makes it hard to enjoy. Please, do not let this deter you from creating. You have a story in you, and you obviously want it to be seen. Take the time to edit to the best of your ability, and do not be afraid to ask someone else to edit it as well. A second set of eyes is needed by every author, myself included. I am going to keep this story in my TBR list, as I really believe it has potential. Good luck to you and please keep writing."
