Name: Tears and roses
Author: Thedudewiththefroggyhat

Summary

Audrey Rae is different from the rest! She always has been, and she always will be. When this thought to be ordinary girl discovers that there are worlds beyond hers, she becomes more determined to find out where she truly belongs. But time is ticking and petals are falling. With the help of a few friends Audrey presses on, half faded, she hopes to untangle the mysterious truth the world has hidden for many secretive centuries. But with lies and plot lingering in the air, Audrey realises she is something far greater than an ordinary girl. One whom could change the world. Who could reveal the feared truth! Can she accomplish her goal before the last petal falls? Or will she become forgotten!?

Genre: Fantasy,Adventure

Author: Thedudewiththefroggyhat

Status: 5yrs ago

Chapters: 3

Rating: n/a

Age Rating: 13+

Chapter 1

The morning sun hit the sky, planting itself on the tip of the spire. The glowing seed grew and grew until it bloomed into a vivid flower of light. Three lean crystal towers stood at the bend of the city, watching over their gleeful people. Their smooth edges shone with a glint of mystery and the light blinked in and out of the clouds. A low hum poured in from the streets and throngs of happy people smiled and chatted among themselves. Laughs came from joyful children as they ran up and down, left and right through the curvy streets. Rose shaped crystal lampposts speckled the pavements, the light forming a candescent orb around the structure. But at night the glow flies came out to intensify the city with their luminous shine, dotting the velvet blanket covering the sky, awakening the rising moon from its sleep. Everything was perfect. The houses were perfect. The shops were perfect. The parks were perfect. The animals were perfect. The people were perfect. Well that was for all except one. Audrey Rae was thirteen. She was different, but not in a good way. Mystery and tension seemed to linger around her, bending the rules of the town’s happiness. She blended in with the crowd though nobody ever noticed the glint in her eyes or the way she had to force a smile upon her lips, like it hurt to stretch them out of her blank expression. Truth and lies confused her. Her mind whirled around in a tornado of questions that never got answered. She wondered if the city was just an illusion for everything was to good to be true. But it wasn’t. She could taste the sweetness of her shiny, red apple, she could smell the unprickled roses in her sleep and feel the solid ground beneath her. She wished it would give in to her weight, she wished he would give in to the truth and unravel the lies surrounding them all. What was so bad about the truth? Why was he scared to reveal it? Living with lies was worse than knowing the truth even if it was horrific and dirty. It was only Audrey that suspected such a thing, everyone else around her liked this world and suspected nothing other than the perfect lives they were given.

Dark had fallen and Audrey rushed home. It was dinner time and her faviroute meal was set upon the table, mouthwatering and delicious. A creamy dish of Mac n cheese. “Dinners on the table.” Said her mother like she hadn’t already noticed. “Your father and I have come to a decision about our conversation last night,” Audrey’s ears pricked up, like a cat listening for the approach, ready to pounce, “these questions that poison your young mind, are better erased...”

“But-“ Audrey started.

“No buts. It’s final! In two weeks time when you turn fourteen these- these stupid, irritating questions that could ruin our reputation and all the generations before and after us, for. Ever. Do I make myself clear!?”

“Yes mother. As you wish.” She was to stunned to eat and her food tasted bitter and cold. That night her thoughts howled, demanding the know the answers to her questions. Audrey fought the pain and uselessness but it was no use. She really was useless. She had gotten her and her family a one way ticket out of the kingdom where they, rather she, would be punished for the lies her own kind had told her. A tear seeped out her eye and rolled down her cheek. A petal had fallen. She knew it had. She could feel it! Whenever she cried or became miserable her rose would etch further and further away until she was faded. Invisible. Forgotten. The ‘protector’ as they called it, guarded the roses that represented the lives of those living and when they died the rose went with them. Red roses were for the most important, wealthy people such as the king, queen and their nobles along side them. Pink roses were for people with less importance and wealth but still had a heavy load of money. White roses were for people like her with little importance and wealth. Audrey had never been to the sacred place but she saw it in her dreams. Her cold miserable dreams. It sparked a match of hope in her heart reminding her that she was the one, the only one and if she wasn’t there the truth would never survive.

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Crixi

This is a good beginning. I recommend dividing your paragraphs for easier reading. There are a lot of details about the street she lived on, perhaps give more of an insight to how the "perfection" makes Audrey feel. And what questions does she have that her parents believe are poisonous. I love the fantasy background you put together. Keep writing :)

5 years

Thedudewiththefroggyhat

Thanks so much I will take your advice! ;)

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