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Within Her Threads- A Murder Mystery

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Summary

Neil has dropped all communication with his sister for last two years. However, when she turns up one morning uninvited, he relents and accedes to bear her for next three days. But something is amiss. Something that Neil couldn't pinpoint was making a very strange vibe around her. Before he could figure out his father calls to tell him that his sister is dead. 'Shuchi died in a car accident.' But how can it be possible when he had been fighting with her ten minutes ago in his London apartment, how can the police fish out her body, several miles away in India. But Neil had to believe the unreal when his father sends him the picture of the dead body of his sister. Shocked beyond words, Neil somehow reaches home where Inspector Bhaskara was waiting to tell him- 'Your sister was probably killed.' Lies, deceit and darkness. This story entails the beautiful relationship of brother and sister with numerous twists and turns. In the world, where we don't forgive people easily, can Neil forgive himself for neglecting his sister for two years?

Status
Complete
Chapters
22
Rating
4.7 3 reviews
Age Rating
16+

Present Day

IIॐश्री गणेशाय नमःII

IIॐ श्री मात्रे नमःII




La Vida Homestay

Ooty

Thursday, 28th February, 2020

It’s five o’ clock in the morning. The candle is burning low. Though it’s still dark outside, the sound of the temple bell is booming loud and clear. I’m sitting in front of a large square window of my room, overlooking the vast gardens of La Vida Homestay.

La Vida, a beautiful bungalow sprawled over the greens, in the midst of Western Ghats, has been recently converted to a homestay when its present owners couldn’t afford to manage the property solely on their private income. It was formerly known as Anand Bhavan, named after the wealthy farmer- Anand, who with an extraordinary vision established the mansion with the view that one day his sons and grandsons would just like him toil in the farms and would be satisfied with the sweet fruits of labour. I guess he didn’t comprehend that hard work is not everyone’s favourite flavour.

The original name was given a French twist when the owner’s grandson propounded that an exotic name will attract more customers. Well, donno how much his theory worked! But, this was definitely not the reason why I booked the whole place for two weeks. I wanted peace and solitude and this place had it in abundance. For miles there are no houses or shops and the only companions I find solace with are trees, birds, inconspicuous house staff and my very own deluge of thoughts. Every day I listen to the melody of the birds, the rhythm of the wind and the bell of the small temple which is built on a knoll, a few meters away across the homestay; but...nothing has managed to bring you the stillness you’re seeking. Right? I have been enjoying the spring blossoms for last one week but out of the blue, it has started raining in the month of February. Now I’m not critical of rain but I like to have it in its own season, not out of it. Someone is knocking on the door. Must be room service, I asked for more candles.

Now you may think that I am one of those inconsiderate people who would wake up others at five am just for candles. But the truth is that the whole house is awake for last two hours. The incessant rain has disrupted the daily routine of the quiet villa and from what I overhear, there are people running with buckets to third-floor rooms as they have discovered the leakage in the newly prepared Maharaja suite. Thank goodness, I chose the ground floor suite, I’m safe; but the lights are out coz of which I have been awake since one hour.

Writing this at five am, wasn’t part of my plan but Jay, my friend who has recently started a publishing company called last night and impelled me to finish the story (I promised to give him), I’ve been working on for last three months. So here I am holding the pen, writing the story about the incident that changed my life forever. Whatever happened....how it happened...

But before I begin, let me introduce myself. My name is Neil, Neil Sharma. I am an Indian by nationality, an app developer by profession and a tennis-player by hobby. I am not a writer. I have never written a single paragraph other than school essays throughout my life and I never thought of writing this....but Jay (as I mentioned earlier) insisted that people should know my story. ‘It will be a sensation dude. You just don’t know yet,’ were his matter-of-fact words.

Now I’m not a strong admirer of his counsel and as a faithful friend, at first I scorned at his suggestion and bluntly rejected the idea but eventually my tenacious mind badgered me to act upon it. I don’t know if it happens with you or not but my mind is super-talkative and pushy for which reason I have not been able to omit its regular, most of the time inappropriate insinuations which it proposed to me during the given circumstances. Having words for every occasion and suggestions for every situation, my mind is my friend as well as foe. Well....I hope you’ll forgive the shortcomings of my writing and probably as Jay said- take something from my story.

It all started a few months ago...One night, in Old Grange Street...

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Hi Ashmi,

I just finished reading your story Within Her Threads – A Murder Mystery and I absolutely loved it. Your writing is engaging, and I kept picturing how immersive and suspenseful it would look as a comic.

I really loved the opening of Present Day (Chapter 1), where Neil reflects on the sorrowful news of his sister Shuchi's death and the unshakeable guilt that haunts him. The emotional turmoil shattered grief, confusion, and the eerie phone call showing a photo of her body would make for powerful, gripping graphic panels. I also found the way you introduce the investigation with Inspector Bhaskara particularly cinematic: Neil's confrontation with betrayal, and the revelation that Shuchi may have been murdered despite being just minutes away earlier, would translate brilliantly into emotionally charged comic sequences full of shadow, tension, and regret. I’m a commissioned artist, and I’d love to bring your story to life as a comic/manga adaptation. No pressure just a heartfelt offer, because I think Within Her Threads would look incredible illustrated visually.

You can check out some of my recent artwork on my DeviantArt (Username – Ev3Verse). If you’re interested, feel free to message me on Discord (Username – Eve_Verse) so we can explore how to turn your vision into a graphic narrative. I’d be honored to collaborate!

Regards,
Evee

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