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This Little Piggy

A brilliant but unsettling story about 5 murders committed by a serial killer. This novel scared me a little bit and I have to commend you for being able to do that.
I wanted to know if you’ve actually met a serial killer before. I mean the way you’ve described the mind of a psychopath is extremely realistic and it frightened me. I like how you’ve also shown the softer side of these serial killers and how they were actually victims of circumstance.
I’m quite impressed by this story and I think you’ve done a wonderful job writing it. Although, I feel like you’ve not proofread the text very well because there are a few typos and spelling mistakes throughout the novel.
It’s a superb story and I hope it gets published soon!

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City of a Million Dots

This is perhaps one of the strangest and most captivating books I have ever read. It took me awhile to grasp what was happening, but after the first few chapters, I was hooked.
Your writing style is unique and I haven’t come across another book written in this way before. Even the language used in this story is different from the kind of stuff I’m used to reading. It’s entrancing and captivating and I really enjoyed it.
I especially liked the concept of Neon, and how everyone needs to be illuminated to see what life is all about. The story really speaks about the very essence of being human and how we should savour each moment of our lives.
This story may be categorised as sci-fi but it’s got its share of thrills and a certain element of mystery that make it worth the read.

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An Evil Family

I like how the story starts off at the scene of the crime after which DS Chris Martin, Jonnie, and Sam proceed to solve the entire case.
The imagery in this story is not as detailed as I would have liked it to be, and it’s difficult for me to imagine the surroundings that you’ve tried to portray. However, you’ve made up for it by investing time and effort into character development, and I feel I can really connect to the people in this story.
Another thing I really liked is how this story made me aware that kids all over the world live in homes with abusive and negligent parents. The story brings to light the reality of these issues and how people are affected by their past; something that I have never really connected with before reading this.
I love this story because although it’s a mystery/thriller, it goes far beyond these boundaries and teaches the readers how compassion and trust shape a person’s habits and beliefs.

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A New Normal

Alright, to be honest, this book is too mushy for me. I’ve sat through a couple of romance novels and I’d say they’re a fun read, but this one was too lovey-dovey. I mean it was evident from the start that Roger and Keely were head over heels in love with each other, but you kept reiterating this fact till it got a little redundant.
Besides this, it’s a quaint novel, filled with happy moments. The language is simple, the message is clear, and I really like the way you’ve written it. The simplicity of the novel conveys volumes to the reader, making the story easy to follow. I like the idea of a married couple trying to balance out their professional and personal lives, and the struggles they are faced with while doing so.
Of course, I haven’t read the previous books in this series so perhaps I’m making misinformed judgements. But considering that you’re writing non-fiction, you could have conveyed the emotions in the story a lot better to help the readers really connect with the characters. For me, that was the only thing missing.

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The Risen

For some morbid reason I actually like the apocalyptic hopelessness that this book makes me feel. I can totally imagine humans behaving this way in case the world came to an end.
Your writing is highly-descriptive and helps the reader to recreate the scenarios that you’ve portrayed in this book. I also like how you’ve described every killing scene as though it were a perfectly natural phenomenon. The only evidence that a tragedy has occurred lies in the way you’ve described a character’s emotions once the killing is done.
The character development was a little slow for my liking, but probably because the book starts off with all the characters trying to fulfill their basic human need for food and survival.
In conclusion, I think this was a well-written horror novel and you’ve managed to convey the despair and dread felt by the characters in this book; an enjoyable read.

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Blood of Thebes

‘Blood of Thebes’ reminds me of all the Greek mythology books I used to read back in the day. It’s a delightful story and I enjoyed every bit of it! You’ve managed to recreate the ancient-Greek setting in this book, and your knowledge of the Greek Gods and their customs is spot on!
The first three chapters got me hooked because you built up the suspense with your unique style of writing. I especially like how Tiresias is constantly tormented by visions that he can’t seem to explain to anyone. It lends an eerie vibe to the book and helps the reader to empathise with this blind character.
Finally, I enjoyed reading the book through the perspectives of so many different characters. Your ability to switch between perspectives is amazing and helps to tie the story together really well.
If there are any sequels to this book, I’d love to read them too. Keep writing and I hope that someday this book gets published!

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My Carpet of the Rainbow

Being an Indian myself (and a Bengali at that) I can say that you’ve managed to accurately portray the behaviour and customs unique to India. I like how amidst the love and joy there’s a darkness that creeps into Lucie’s mind every time she sees her father interacting with Shiela Aunty.
The storyline is great and I like the direction it’s heading in. However, you may want to ease up on the euphemisms a bit. A few of them are great, especially the one where you’ve compared a person’s gambling addiction to the ‘hole’ in his piggy bank.
But I feel like the story is overridden with euphemisms, making it a hard read. A reader will have to decipher the meaning of each euphemism in order to continue the story. My suggestion would be to leave a few euphemisms in there and narrate the rest of the novel as simply as possible. The story stirs up the soul on its own, and you don't need euphemisms to heighten the drama.
All in all, I’d say this is a powerful story that needs to be written in simpler language.

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Hour Empty Child

Alright, so for starters, the theme you’ve come up with and the general direction of this story is great. I like how the people in the country of Peranim can choose to become ‘Adventurers’ when they turn 15.
But you need to work on your writing if you want to effectively communicate this story to your readers. I’m noticing a lot of issues with subject-verb agreement and with the way sentences are structured. And all that aside, there are many so typos, spelling mistakes, and grammatical errors in the story!
All these minor issues make it extremely difficult to continue reading after a point. I also feel like you need to rethink the way you introduce characters into the story. Right now it’s too random, making it difficult to build a relationship with any of the characters.
I would say stick with the storyline because the concept sounds exciting, but change the way you approach it.

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