It's Never Simple
The beginning is dynamic, fast-paced, and I like it. The dialog is snappy, witty, and quite realistic, perhaps too realistic. I am personally not a fan of crude language in a dialog, even if it does add to the realism. Strong words limit the circle of potential readers, to my mind. This book could have readers from age 12 an up, but if you keep those words, I don't know what bottom age it can be recommended for. But it's just my opinion and preference. I think overall it's a good beginning, it needs only the usual proofreading and editing. Definitely keep going, it's developing into something interesting!
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