25 chapitres lus
"Love it so much as it is different from the usual ones. Not many characters were present which was suitable for this story. Keep going. "
20 chapitres lus
"I really like the plot line, I like that it's not just another vampire story IYKWIM. There is a lot of beautiful world building and sub plots that are coming together nicely. Can't wait to see what the two main characters become, I feel like they are both on the verge of becoming powerful, individually and together. Each chapter is intriguing, a lot happens which keeps it interesting. "
1 chapitres lus
"I think this story has the potential to be really fun, but I think it's a HARD story to tell well, and the author's really pushing their limits- which is also awesome, but can be challenging as a reader. Top three things I liked 1. Interesting worldbuilding - Kai came out as a 'half breed' but stopped aging at 20, while apparently requiring blood to live? Was he turned or did he just naturally stop aging? How did that differe from his siblings who were unborn when their mothers were turned? Etc. 2. I like the combination of Kai's interest in science and medicine alongside his art. 400 years is a long time- it makes sense that he'd have the chance to pursue many different interests rather than a 400 year slog doing the same thing. 3. Kai's voice has the potential to be really interesting because it really READS like he sort of froze in a few ways at 20, for better or worse. Top three things I'dl like to see a bit of revision on 1. the fights between Kai and his brothers feel very shallow, not just the same insults but it felt like the dialogue was almost word for word the same. I'd be curious as to WHY the animosity- the differnce in blood status is one thing but it feels less grounded by having it be that simple and all four feeling exactly the same. 2. I'd like a slightly better idea where the world falls on 'vampires are real' vs 'vampires are folklore' scale- the level of wealth involves makes me wonder how they hide if it's the latter or how important they are if it's the former. 3. I'd like to see more distinct voices for the characters. Kai, his brothers, Lucan and Tahlia all have basicaly the same manner of speech right now, and varying that would help make the characters more three dimensional and real rather than sort of placeholders for a character. This gave me Blade vibes with the serum, half-vampire lore, and Great Criminal Network of Vampires, and I think it could be really fun! :) "