Quelle est votre opinion ?
Great
"This author writes longing better than almost anyone on this platform. The wanting in this story is so palpable you feel it yourself. Completely absorbing."
Necesito la segunda parte
"He visto que hay algo publicado ya de la segunda parte, está en ingles. Así que supongo q me esperaré a que esté terminada. La espero con ansia "
Missing information
"Although the plot is decent, the exposition and development need some serious work. Details are suddenly referred to despite not being previously explained. I spent a lot of time going back to previous chapters looking for when details had been revealed, only to find that they hadn't been - not even through implication. The writing style feels disjointed, flashbacks are not always consistent, and one particular "twist" is underused, then dismissed. The situation with the Prince is swept under the carpet, when this could have easily added another level of drama. Emotional development is lacking, and previously experienced trauma is not addressed. Having reached the end, it seems that there is a second part - I'm not sure that I'm emotionally invested enough in the characters to be able to read it, if the style continues this way. If this is a first attempt, then I'd give it a solid 5/10 for the beginning of the plot. I could write pages of notes for each chapter on amendments that are required, but I'm not being paid to do that here. My free advice is to go back and actually READ what you have written, take notes on the gaps in the story, and fill them. Bonne chance! "
