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Poetry Captured From Reflections Off Lakes

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Summary

A series of poetry. Nothing else expected. Positive feedback welcome.

Status
2yrs ago
Chapters
13
Rating
5.0 (1 review)
Age Rating
13+

Fresh Air

The air there is fresh from

Sun-on-cement-baked humidity

no hint of dust, fumes and those clouds

of grey matter and reddish clouds from sites

Men labour with only thin plastic - morning cool to

Noon unbearable hell - to shelter beneath


The air there is fresh from

carbon exhaled from millions of

bustling hustling workers and from the

weary sighs of vehicles and machinery

that choke on coal and sputter smog

Grey amidst winter skies

Where has the blue gone? asks

a child clinging to her phone - a

false branded knock-off of luxury -

She dreams of pure cotton clouds

dotting the brightest blue the skies offer.


Wakes to another dull day

The air there is fresh like morning dew

Leaves betray not a single shade but green

evergreen, no dressing up for coming winter

The wind is warm, no cold that

creeps like corpses come alive and hug you

so tightly you scarcely breathe and still you wrap

a bolt of thick wool about your neck, choking

on what little warmth it offers your measly body


The air there is fresh from

the smell that permeates cities and urbanisation

we are rats running circles for reasons unknown to

Us but we don’t get off; to get off is to see eyes

staring glaring judging mocking gossiping

We breath in that same air used by others

Again and again and again

We breathe the air the machines eat and cough out

Again and again and again

toxin of the nagging and scolding,

smoke from fired employees burning alit

stinking depression from the ruined

decay’s odour from the dead in white walls

Again and again and again


The air there is fresh.

To sip upon it is like the finest dish, soup, meal

To stay there is like a hopeless bliss

Still I let myself dream

Dream of fresh air.


* let me know of any grammar or vocab mistakes

** will update once inspiration hits me

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