A feisty couple chapters to start off a book.

"You wrote an grippling first couple chapters to really engross the reader into the book! You combined action and character development to great an interesting and flowing novel. I would certainly be interested to see the few chapters to see how the characters, Nicole in particular, develop. I think that one key area for improvement would be to break up the chapters into paragraphs...instead of writing the entire chapter as one long paragraph. Apart from that, I really enjoyed to mix of action and dialogue, and would love to see more of 'Dragon King for a Husband' in the future! Keep writing, Inst1nctualWater"