What is your opinion?
Dear WallerTheWriter, I’m really enjoying your story!
"The concept of clearing out a mum’s childhood home is so relatable yet haunting at the same time. I’m really drawn to the mystery behind the mansion. "
Review
"A hidden gem is a well-written story and I enjoyed its only available chapter. Listening to your parents’s POV and talking about past is an amazing feeling. Visiting places that witnessed our happiest era is an unexplainable feeling. I would suggest you to breakdown larger paragraphs into shorter ones and lessed the space as it gets hard to read it the way it is rn. Good work, though! "
Hidden Gem
"I liked how the mum told the story of her parents but there's a mystery about it I wish there was more especially with that ending I know there's another book about it I am gonna read that but I feel like this book needed more it but I'm glad to be reading it ^^ it's been on my tbr list since last year "
HIDDEN GEM REVIEW
"THE STORY IS AMZING. WELL WRITTEN AND GRAMMATICALLY EXCELLENT."
Loved it!
"Short story and loved the suspense created. Thank you!"
Atmospheric and Intriguing, But Leaves Me Wanting More
""Hidden Gem" masterfully builds an atmosphere of haunting beauty and mystery from the very first paragraph. The description of the isolated, lifeless mansion, the flickering candlelight against the cobwebs, and the sound of windy rain and tapping branches create a powerfully eerie and immersive setting. The intrigue is expertly woven through small details, like the grandfather discreetly pointing in the portrait, leading to the fantastic discovery of the secret room—a truly captivating moment. However, this discovery feels like just the beginning. The story concludes precisely as the mystery deepens, with the reveal of the hidden fountain passage and the grandfather's unpublished library. While this effectively builds anticipation for connected tales, it makes this particular piece feel somewhat incomplete, like a compelling first chapter rather than a fully resolved narrative. I am genuinely curious to learn more about the secrets this mansion holds and the stories within those unpublished books."
Hidden Gem
"In my opinion. This was a wonderful short story. It was well written and definitely caught my attention. I thank the author for writing this short story. 😊♥️😊"
Wish there was more
"I hope this is not a one-shot; I'm curious to read more."
Hello.
"I like such style of discribing usually :) And when I read this story I want to know what happens next. (I don't know something about your writing skills, although at first glance everything looks correct, because English in not my original language, sorry.)"
Good read
"Captivating read that showcases the author’s talent for crafting engaging characters and vivid settings. The prose flows effortlessly, drawing you into the story with a voice that feels both personal and compelling. The book’s strengths lie in its pacing and the emotional resonance of its themes, which keep you turning pages late into the night. However, while the story is undeniably enjoyable, there’s a sense that the world and its characters could have benefited from more depth. Certain elements of the backstory felt underexplored, and some plot points seemed to beg for greater detail, leaving a desire for more richness in the narrative. That said, the author’s potential shines brightly, and this work is a testament to their ability to craft a memorable story. The shortcomings in depth didn’t overshadow the overall enjoyment; instead, they left me eager to see what the author will write next. If this book is any indication, they have a strong foundation for storytelling and an exciting future ahead. I look forward to diving into more of their work, hoping for the same engaging style with an even fuller sense of world-building and character exploration."
Hidden Gem 💎
"Straight forward short story but I love it. It all came together bringing the hidden gem that was something more special not many knew about. Hidden in plain sight; absolutely brilliant because to others things can be missed with our eyes. What would look like a simple decorative item leads to something more. Some things don't make sense, what lead to a hidden gem..you have to be really open minded to see there's more to it. Or else we miss a hidden gem worth finding."
Enjoyable
"An enjoyable story, even for readers for whom English is a second language"
Review
"I think the spacing between the dialogue is excessive, and it feels your kinda rushing through this story. the dialogue feels dry and unnatural between close family members and the transitions are pretty bad. I found myself losing genuine interest not because of the plot but because of the confusing and jagged writing. I think this could be a very good story if written differently."
Cosy read
"The story has potential, the setting os onteresting and the MS is nice. With some work on the writing style which seems a bit stiff, it cold be a sweet little read. I'm looking forward to uncovering more secrets of the mansion."
Curious
"Hidden Gem opens with a wonderfully atmospheric setting — the creaking house, the flickering candlelight, the unease that something is both hidden and watching. The pacing draws you in gradually, and I appreciated how the tension builds without giving too much away too soon. I do wonder how the narrator's emotional connection to the house might unfold — there's clearly a family history here, and it feels like a missed opportunity (so far) not to reflect a bit more on what that means to them personally. Even a small internal moment could add depth to the mystery. That said, the writing sets a clear tone, and the scene direction is confident. I'd love to see the character's voice become even more vivid in future chapters, perhaps through moments of vulnerability, reflection, or even humor. Looking forward to seeing where the mystery leads."
Hidden Gem
"A compelling, unique, and more personal story that ignites a lot of glee and mystery at the same time! I think by adding more core details to the plot development could help with the author's use of expression :) THIS WAS INCREDIBLE!!! 💙💙💙"
Tittle suits the writing ✍️ 👌 😍
"I actually liked it "
Interesting read
"Over all this is an interesting little story. It’s got a solid plot and good built in suspense for a mystery. I do wish there was more in the characters themselves though as their personalities didn’t really shine through. The bit at the end about the books does make me wonder what they are about though! "
Hidden Gem
"The plot was intriguing, but I don't feel that you brought it out. The structure was rather juvenile. It feels more like the skeleton of a story waiting to be filled in and brought to life. I just wish it had more. it is a great beginning to something I know you can create with some work. Also the spacing between paragraphs is very upsetting, it disturbs the flow of the story, fill it in with details! Thank you for sharing. Keep at it."
Needs more force!
"The plot is very straightforward and limited first person POV fits the narration, since we're following a child. The characterisation is based around the standard three-member family, father, mother & child, could be better or worse, but it works out fine for this story. The set is an abandoned grandfather house, usually spooky, but on this story it's not evoking any suspense nor tension. Pace moved on point and writing style needs more work. This type of story definitely fits into a genre that isn't Mystery Themes of Family Heritage exists but it needs more exploration within the story, I mean "Why do Grandfather had a secret entrance in a fountain?" "What function does it serves for him?" And as for morale message, spend time with your parents or family as a whole."
