Soulmates in Heaven and Hell

"Overall, I enjoyed the story! You do a really great job of describing setting (which I'm v envious of cause that's the area I most lack in in my writing lol) and you have a very visceral way of describing things that make scenes move well. I like your dialogue and overall the plot is engaging and very unique, which is always good to see. A few criticisms though would be that I think the plot moves a little too fast. I'd rather see maybe two or three of those sections in one chapter and have them be longer scenes with more time spent in them rather than like 10 different scenes in each chapter. Just spend more time focusing on a smaller amount so we can really spend time developing the characters and their relationships and lives and have these events unroll a little slower. LIke, for everything that happens in like the first chapter that could maybe be 2-3 separate chapters. As far as technical stuff goes, I noticed a few issues, but it was almost all punctuation errors. Nothing you probably couldn't catch in a quick read through, or if you used a program like Grammarly to catch it all for you. All in all, though, great job and good luck with the rest!"