The Archer and the Orchid

"I think the plot is really interesting. It's like the Brad Pitt and Angelina Jolie movie "Mr. and Mrs. Smith" but make it a period drama. I think there are parts that are a bit confusing (but I've only read the first 5 chapters so perhaps things clear up later) because I don't really understand what these two factions are that they're on. What is the conflict that they're on opposite sides of? I think it'd be good to make this clearer from the beginning cause I'm having a hard time figuring out what the drama is going to be, which means the suspense of them figuring out they're on opposite sides isn't building. I think you'd benefit from building that dramatic irony (kind of like the movie Mr. and Mrs. Smith does! The viewer knows they're in opposite spy organizations before they figure it out). The only other comment I have is the technical stuff. There are a lot of capitalization errors, but it's not horrible. The only major gripe I have is the way you've structured the dialogue. sometimes you'll have two pieces of quotations right next to each other, which makes it really hard to figure out who is speaking. You should create a new paragraph every time the speaker changes so that we can clearly see which piece of dialogue belongs to which character. Without it, I found myself struggling to figure out who was saying what, which can break up the reading experience and also if I made a mistake and attributed a piece of dialogue to the wrong character, then that could hinder my understanding of the story. So I think that's definitely something that you should fix, and it should be a quick one too since it's just adding paragraphs. Overall, though, great job, super creative idea, and good luck!"