Death Comes from the Sky

"I really love your plot! It's an interesting horror theme, and I like that you show the antagonist's POV as well. I think some people are reluctant to do this to maintain a sense of mystery like a "whodunnit" but I think in this case it's helpful and adds to the suspense to clue the reader in right away. Similar to Stephen King's "Mr. Mercedes" - which is one of my favorite detective-type stories. I think the writing style is great, but at times it can feel a little too casual for my liking. Especially since it's a more series subject matter, and I'd like to see maybe each character's narration (although I know it's in third person, but still) maybe have different tones to really differentiate them. Like, to me, it makes more sense for the psycho's narration to be told in a more casual, flippant tone because that fits the personality. But for the two MC's I think maybe more of a rigid feel would add to the anxiety they're feeling, if that makes sense. Overall, though, excellent job and kudos to creating a wonderful story!"