Good voice

"Chapters 1-3: I just read the first part of your story and really enjoyed it. This is not usually the type of story I like, but your unique voice and writing style made it very interesting to me. I liked the details that you through in and the way that you described people's inward environments. The plot-line with the overly-obsessive ex is a little cliche, but I like where you're going with it so far. Eva is an interesting protagonist, one that I feel I can support, and I'm interested in finding out more about her. Your writing was generally very clean and tight, but I did notice several areas where the grammar seemed a little off. I was also confused by some of the areas where Eva was texting (it might help if you italicize the texts). And also, I would have liked to see more setting in the first chapter. I didn't really have any sense of time or place during that chapter, leaving it a little vague. It's especially critical to give setting through the eyes of the protagonist if you're not going to give a physical description of the protagonist right away. It helps the reader feel more connected and gives them a sense of character. All in all, it's a good start! Great work!"