Too passive! (1.chapter)

"I have read your first chapter.... First of all, don't start giving me information about the history of your world, what war this country was involved in, what kind of people emigrated where, and a bunch of names of places I've never heard of. This information should only be known to the author, give it to me during the plot.... Introduce me to country xy through the eyes of the MC, talk about the war by describing the soldiers passing by, etc.... Now for the first chapter: never start introducing your MC as if you want to get him engaged, I don't care how tall he is, what he likes to eat, who his best friends are.... This is not a fantasy novel, you wrote a biography.... And it was really passive. One really important piece of advice is. Never tell! Always show! If you think the reader needs to know that the MC is tall, let him take something off a shelf that no one else can get to, that's much more interesting than saying he's six feet tall. I think your world is based on Naruto. The anime didn't start by introducing him, it started with a little boy desecrating Hoke Mountain/the Hoke Monument - showing his personality, not telling it. If you think some of my words made sense and you want to rewrite, hit me up on the wall/dm whatever, I'm willing to read it again"