What is your opinion?
Great!
"Overall, I think this is a very solid plot you have here. For a book that I wouldn't normally pick because of the genre and general theme, it was definitely a welcoming surprise for me to pick it up and be interested in your plot. :D. The way that you have developed this city of Elderville mixed in with your ability to create a great visual of your scenes, you have something that is very promising. I look forward to more!"
I love it
"I love the Queen oldest daughter rebelliousness am hooked just by reading the first chapter "
The plot seems promising
"It was a bit difficult for me to follow the story because the paragraphs were very long and there was a lot of backstory. So try breaking down the paragraphs for easier reading. Also maybe limit the backstory as this is a first chapter. Focus on easing is into the fantasy world of the book. I tried to follow what happened to Nail but I didn't really get it."
inconsistency in the use of tenses in the story?
"English isn't my first language, but there seems to be an inconsistency in the use of tenses in the story."
