Solid work!

""Ishtar's descendant" lured me in with the cool title and cover. Even though I'm not usually the type for sci-fi, the story sounded interesting and I decided to give it a try. I followed along the story of a bio-psychologist named Tricia Evans and got to read a few scenes I could picture really well (the warehouse), which were also quite shocking. One thing I think you missed out on was the possibility to have Tricia's inner conflict put into focus, e.g. her inner scientist vs her moral compass as an individual. At times it felt like wasn't okay (the scene in the warehouse) with what she was confronted with, but in the next scene it felt like she didn't care at all. Also, I think it would have been cool to see her be the reason why, in the end, everything got leaked to the public. In your version, Tricia was asked to help find a solution, arrived in Berlin, saw what's wrong and didn't really do anything to prevent it. Of course, that's just my personal opinion, but I think it's a bit of a shame she couldn't shine as a main character in this short story! Punctuation- and grammar-wise I'm not that qualified to judge your style due to me being an ESL writer (German), but I can assure youI didn't see any spelling mistakes or anything else that would disrupt the writing flow. I could follow along just fine. :) Nevertheless, solid work! "