Can Be More!

"Carrie has a nice unique concept of a story. So far I like how the story is going, I like the pace, I like the character, and I like the mystery that she makes in the end of every chapter. I feel like if the story is edited more, it will even more amazing! So far I dont find any big or disturbing grammar mistakes, all seems fine, it is just some technical writing here and there and a little typo but it is still okay :) Maybe my main concern is the dialogue cause there is no "" in every dialogue so it does not differentiate between narrative, inner dialogue or even the dialogue. I believe Carries has potential and the rest of the story seems really intriguing! I will probably check it out more later, but so far I enjoyed it xD good luck Carrie I believe in you. You have done a really good job so far!^^"