What is your opinion?
Banshee
"Succinct piece of work, nicely done. Very pleased to read a piece that touches on one of the key aspects of Irish folklore, the Banshee. The suspense was very well built up with minimal descriptive tangents. There's a few typos but nothing that can't be easily corrected with another read over. Great work. Keep writing."
nice but need to improve
"it was nice but need to improve ...your writing skill was not so good but it happens in the first time.....Dont loss hope ..sometimes it happens ..Keep writing.. I hope your next story will get hundred reviews . keep writing"
Good start but needs more depth
"I just took a look at this story, and I was very intrigued. I would like to know more about this family and the old lady and what's going on. It seemed really too brief for me to grasp what was going on or the implications of the story. You could do a lot more with this if you wanted to. At the end, I found myself wondering if the old lady was responsible for their father dying so quickly. I even wondered if maybe she was the mother, coming to release their father's soul. I think that if you expanded the characters more and gave them some backstory, it would give this story some needed depth. You could start by the physical descriptions of the characters, then move to things like the way they move and the way they talk. Everything a character does should reflect their personality in some way. Short fiction is super tricky because you don't have a lot of time with the reader, so that means that there needs to be a LOT of character in a really small place. You could also make the situation with the old lady scarier by adding some atmosphere. What do their surroundings look like? Is it dark? Does the dark seem to cling to Nathan? Is there a yellowish fog gliding through the streets? That sort of thing can build mood and tension in the reader. If you worked on some of this, I would be very interested in reading this again and seeing what you can do with it. Other than that, just the writing itself needed to be cleaned up, due to issues with grammar. I hope this helps! I would love to see this cleaned up and developed a little more. Great work!"
