great 1st chapter

"It was a genuine pleasure to read something that someone has taken the effect to proof read. So many stories on here are sadly lost as the poor grammar and lack of spell checks and proof reading (so many sentences have clearly just been edited and not amended correctly) often make it next to impossible to understand the authors intent. A real shame. This is not a dig at anyone I am a terrible speller myself - this is why I appreciate the importance of checking your work before its seen by an audience. This reads beautifully and was very entertaining as well as unique, I hope you will be adding more.... to this or just more short stories"