Beautiful potential!

"You brought a unique perspective and I loved the addition of the notes before going on with the story. The characters had genuine and predictable reactions and thoughts to the scenes happening, and I seriously liked the way it was all generally written - the tone was perfect, definitely matching the cover's vibe. What i did notice through the reading experience was that sometimes the paragraph stretched on too big. The dialogues were strong and on point, but I wished there were some indications and descriptions between the conversations! Example in the chapter with most dialogues, i wished it was just "Khalid: {dialogue}" - that was the only part that seemed to confuse me :)) Other than that I see amazing potential. I loved the inclusivity (the word ''rupee" brought me so much joy, I just love South Asian inclusivity in books) and the general ambience was beautifully on point. You do amazing with descriptions and subjective writing altogether - if you can work out the balance between those two, you'll be just unstoppable!!! I can't wait to read more from you, you're on the right track to progress! Great job <333"