What is your opinion?
I was a little confused
"The technical aspects of it were quite good, but I was never exactly sure of where the plot was going. The story jumps right in to the characters going on their quest/scavenger hunt with little to no set up, and the conclusion to the whole thing felt slightly unsatisfying and rushed. The main characters weren't given much of a personality, so it was hard to connect with them at all, especially with how short the story was. It's an interesting concept, but I think that it could improve with more editing."
Plot development
"I think the idea was pretty cool, but... I couldn't really tell where the plot was going. You had good use of vocabulary, but you should have checked for more grammatical errors. It was a real roller-coaster. I think what you should do is have some dialogue, side adventures, etc. Maybe just remember what the task at hand is. When I read the title, "Vader's sister." I was a bit confused at first because it was taking a little long to get to the point. I think you should take your story and expand on the idea. It has the potential to be great."
