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An Enchanting Tale: A Review of [The Demon Prince's Lowly Servant]
" In this book, readers are introduced to Lila, a human in a world where humans are relegated to being slaves and pets for supernaturals. Upon reaching the age of servitude, Lila’s defiance results in severe punishment, and she is auctioned off as a pet—an even more demeaning fate than slavery. Her fate seems bleak until an extravagant bid by an old witch buys her freedom for a different kind of servitude. However, Lila soon discovers that it wasn't just a witch who bought her but the demon prince, Lucian—a figure both devious and enigmatic, who has haunted her dreams. Despite his fearsome reputation as the progeny of Lucifer, Lucian treats her with unexpected kindness, leading Lila to suspect an ulterior motive she can't quite decipher. The revelation that Lucian is her soulmate adds an exciting twist to the narrative. The author’s youthful exuberance shines through in this story, making it a promising read. While there are grammatical errors that could benefit from proofreading and editing, the potential of the book is undeniable. The interactions between characters are engaging, and the writer’s notes offer a unique connection with readers. In conclusion, [The demon prince's lowly servant] is a creative and intriguing story with a distinctive writing style. With time and experience, this writer’s talent will undoubtedly flourish. I eagerly anticipate the next chapters and wish the author all the best in their writing journey."
Good read
"Like the characters and story"
Demon Prince's Lowly Servant
"This is SUCH a good story. 10 out of 10. Best book in the history of writing."
Demon Prince's lowly servant
"Lila's life is not easy. She lives in a world populated by cruel supernaturals where children like her are sold as slaves in auctions. I'm two chapters deep in the story, and I already like Lila. She is a strong girl devouted to her family. I would recommend this book to readers who enjoy the young adult fantasy genre. There are some grammar and spelling mistakes, but it's nothing that could not be improved by careful editing. Good work, author."
Engaging, Gentle, Charming
"This is an incredibly charming piece. It pulls the reader along, soft and undisturbed like a cloud. The writing is compelling ,and it has some wonderful gems in there. The descriptors are a joy to read. I sense the author is young (and piecing together some context clues, this appears to be the case) and they are still finding their voice in writing. But this is a beautiful thing to watch unfold. There is staggering potential here."
Demon Prince's Lowly Servant
"WRITING THIS REVIEW AT THREE CHAPTERS: Firstly, I am shocked by the quality of writing, given the author's age. Extremely impressive, especially since I'm guessing this is your debut novel. I remember the way I was writing when I was your age (I started with Taylor Swift and 5sos fanfic lol) and it was not this good, I'll tell you that, so keep it up. I think as far as the plot goes: It's engaging. I've read stories like it in the sense that it follows a common trope in fantasy stories, but if it ain't broke, don't fix it. I really like the worldbuilding so far, it's clear that the author has a creative mind, which is half the battle. There are a lot of punctuation and grammatical errors. I'd recommend using a program like Grammarly to help with that. And reading other books, that'll teach a lot about how to do those more technical things. Also, please write in the present tense! I made in-text comments about this with some examples, but it's super important and will improve your writing immensely! Also, one other thing I noticed, is sometimes you opt for "bigger" words when a simpler word would suffice. A lot of authors think that complex vocabulary equates to making writing prettier/better, but really you should use these sparingly. Don't bust out the thesaurus every time. Usually, my test is I'll ask myself "does this sentence still make sense if I use the simpler word?" If yes, opt for simpler. If not, keep the complex. This will not only draw attention from the reader when you do use those "bigger" words, but it also can appeal to more people who maybe don't have a huge vocabulary. Furthermore, sometimes the "bigger" word doesn't fit as well. I'll provide a few made-up examples: "I have a bad feeling about this" vs "I have a dreadful feeling about this" <- technically, the sentence still works with "dreadful" but it just doesn't flow as well. It also doesn't add anything to say "dreadful" when "bad" works just fine. Adversely: "Awaiting my fat was dreadful" vs. "Awaiting my fate was bad" <- in this case, the more specific word makes more sense in this context. "bad" doesn't seem to really fit in describing the severity of what's happening. Therefore, the sentence benefits from the more complex word. I hope that helps and makes sense - it seems nitpicky, but it's important stuff that will help you over time! I had to stop myself from doing that too (this will also be especially good for academic writing in school!!) One more thing I would encourage, not necessarily in this story, but just in general: think about having more complex villain archs/characters - I'm def guilty of writing very flat villains who are all bad and don't have interesting/complex motivations (if I ever even give explanation for their motivations) - but doing so adds A LOT of depth to a plot. Treat your villains the same as you do your heroes! Good luck and keep up the good work, you have natural talent and creativity - the rest will come with time and practice - happy writing :)"
