Strong Start, Interesting Follow-up

"This story pulls you in from the get-go and makes you interested in what's happening, which is extremely important for any story but especially so for a short story or excerpt. Many interesting details about the world are shown through the thoughts and experiences of Haghuf, without said details being muddled by unnecessary words or flowery sentences. But the style is still strong and it conveys what it was meant to convey; it pulls you in, intrigues you, makes you wonder about the world Haghuf comes from.... Overall, this is very well done and makes me want to read more."