Advice

"First paragraph 5 Line They were they last girl (The) 5 Line of the first pov even Seen(ever) I like it for now even tho i don't really embark on things yet but i would continue. Just make sure that your character talk like they use to Shortens your words like was not IS wasn't i don't think that a scholar girl will say was not and also every character besides that . Maybe you Can give some additional dialogue tags or just things that characterize them , i feel like they aren't Real in my mind"