Sxx with my mafia step brother

"The plot of the story is good and has real potential to be even better. The story needs proof reading as I had to decipher a lot of it myself. I think research of the uk is needed a place and the area. In the UK we do not use free ways and we do not call 911 we call 999. I built up a picture in my head of the apartment Tiffany and lu were living in but then it turned into a house with stairs inside. I like the base line of the story but it needs a bit of work in areas to make sense as at times I felt very confused. "