Interesting story

"I picked up this book with how that it would be interesting and it was. Unfortunately that's about it. Often while trading I didn't know where they were or who was talking. Horrific grammar and no real ending this feels unfinished. The first part with the scene with the scientist being interviewed is very disjointed from the scenes in space. Characters monologue far too often and repeat actions multiple times eg 'Jesus smiled'. Tense is poorly constructed and switches between past, present and future crazily. There is potential but this story needs a full on rewrite. One last note, the parts with Jesus talking and the references to the bible are not accurate descriptions of what the bible says about God and I find it offensive. Please don't give up writing but keep working and never give up! Contact me if you want tips on improving it."