Ghost Story

"The idea is good and needs some polishing. This is a ghost story that one would tell at a campfire to scare small children. No details are given to the characters but it really isn't needed for something like this. However, better story flow could capture a reader much more and more suspenseful language could keep a reader on edge. The story DOES use a copywritten title of a character, Witcher, that I STRONGLY recommend changing Otherwise this simple ghost story has the potential to be even better with some fine tuning and some explanation of the overall setting and culture this belongs to."