What is your opinion?
Cute
"A good start to what will become a great short story. I hope to see more. "
Sweet
"I really enjoyed this story and can say it brought a tear to my eye. It was very imaginative, and Sir Kip was the best minister ever! I'm glad the Fae were included too. Having Freda walk Lily down the aisle was great because Lily wouldn't really want her father to be there with all the upset he could cause. Hope to see more down the road."
An Ordained Kip - Love It
"This is a very creative, fun story. I loved the interplay between Kip and Anton and Aton's special gift for Lily. So appropriate that family and fae were at the wedding. It's about time they got married!! Thank you!"
Lovely
"Great read! It was like I was there! The limericks were clever! Very well done."
almost like L.Sherrer
" I read all four chapters. This story reads like Lydia Sherrer wrote it. The author got all of the dialog, snarkiness of Kip, Sebastian and Lily. I did spy a few small grammatical errors. I would be interested if Lydia would use this in the final chapters of LLHP? I was impressed"
Delightful
"I really enjoyed this. Well done!!!! A couple of typos but other than that fun and perfect. Enjoyable. I loved it."
I Do review
"This was a fun take on Lily's and Sebastian's wedding. But it made me feel like it was unfinished. I don't know why you threw in the leprechaun if you weren't going to finish telling that part of the story. It just seemed like an odd thing to add. You do something, especially in Chapter 3 that needs to be fixed. In your story telling you bounce between past and present tense. Most of the story you tell as something that has happened, using past tense. Then for some reason you switch to telling the story in the present tense, as if you are viewing it as it is happening. Neither is a bad way to tell a story, but you need to be consistent. Jumping between tenses is distracting. Choose one way and stick to it. There are a few other small errors in grammar, punctuation and sentence structure that were just missed during proofreading and editing. All in all I enjoyed your story. I liked that Anton came to the wedding and gave Lily a family heirloom. It was quite clever to have Sir Kipling become ordained and perform the wedding ceremony. You have some good ideas for the world of Love, Lies and Hocus Pocus."
Great idea bringing in leprechauns !
"You captured Lily, Kip, and Sebastian quite well. I didn’t like that they spent their weekend in Savannah n the same room. Lydia has been careful to keep Sebastian faithful to purity even though his desire is so intense. She also doesn’t use as much profanity. The idea of a leprechaun was brilliant although I was quite unclear about what exactly the bad luck was and why Kip performed the ceremony. When all is said and done, you actually wrote a story and it was pretty good and I didn’t even submit one. I salute you!"
