What is your opinion?
Summing everything up
"I honestly see the improvement and its lowkey hitting the spot,so thank you for the effort author. Secondly as a fellow writer myself,english isn’t my first language so its a bit of a headache to write without it sounding boring or too stretched,so what I do is I write it in a way that every paragraph rhymes. Meaning I’ll sometimes point out a behavior or a feeling blatantly,without explaining it in a show don’t tell situation. It saves up a lot for the more important storyline that I try to stick to. Thirdly,I live your book,the characters and the dynamics as a whole,when you introduced Sara I thought you’d put them in a third wheel situation,im thankful you didn’t,as I was team Ryon and Cia only!! Now I shall wait for more than one update to not get too anxious and the waiting will end me. Sending live, support and lots of hugs from saudi arabia,keep it up love✨✨🤍"
Story line is moving smoothly
"Writing is not continuing in the sameway there are lots of flaws but author's effort is visible "
