Childhood memories

"This story was definitely something different than what I usually read. It brought back some childhood memories, like the games and the sports. The way you portrayed these things was solid and relatable. Some word choices, however, seem to be a bit too mature for a 7 year old. I would have a look there. For example, he said he would get a sibling. I would rephrase this, too: I'm getting a brother or sister. I'm curious to see how this progresses! "