What is your opinion?
Really the Invisible girl!!!
"Dear Author, A gripping, psychological plot, that delves into the complicated emotional situation of Elizabeth Parker, a girl who has suffered neglect and a whole lot. She has conditioned her heart to accepting the circumstances that surround her, hoping for an escape. The plot is captivating, with a lot of emotion expressed. And the writing style, first person point of view, gives us an insight into the heart of the character, Liz. I love the writer's style and the entire plot. Great work, author. Keep it up🔥🔥🔥❤️❤️❤️"
invisible girl
"Absolutely loved it!! Wow! This was a huge kick up from the other story. Bolder, stronger lead character and Cha Cha Cha on the spice meter, hell yeah! You got it girl, just gotta watch those punctuations and spacing. And those friggin' I's. Would love to see more of your work, keep it up. Thank you for sharing. Love to all readers and writers."
Wow
"Just started the book and it's amazing! I was totally immersed in main character! She's so bold and the type of girl who won't take your crap. I love the way writer did an amazing job chapters. Absolutely amazing. "
Great ideas
"I like the way this book is going. The main character is interesting. Your writing conveys how she feels, to the point that it is uncomfortable to read, but that is what you want: the reader to feel sadness and loss. I would advise double-checking grammar and adding more details, as it is a great story. Overall, it is a great story; I look forward to reading more of it. "
Love it
"Liz is the definition of a bad-ass survivor. She’s been through hell and back, dealing with neglectful parents and fake friends, but she’s not about to let that stop her. Her dream of breaking into the male-dominated world of Formula 1? Total goals. Throw in a hot-but-shady guy like Josh, and you’ve got drama for days. This story is all about fighting back, living life on your terms, and not giving a single f*** about what anyone thinks. It’s raw, real, and seriously addictive. "
this is a brilliant story
"Wow just Wow! I would be her friend I would take her on adventures with me to have her imagine the places we could go she's witty and she likes josh and could be something more down the road can't wait to see more"
Immense Potential with Room to Grow: A Bold and Captivating Journey
""The story shows immense potential and is already shaping up to be something special. The plot is intriguing, but it could benefit from a little more depth in both world-building and character development. Adding more details and emotional layers will truly immerse your readers and help them connect with the characters on a deeper level. Don't hesitate to dive into the emotional and descriptive aspects—paint vivid pictures, explore their feelings, and create comparisons that will linger in the reader’s mind. There are a few rough spots, particularly with transitions between scenes, where the flow could be smoother, and a couple of logical inconsistencies that need refining. Some of the character dynamics feel a bit off, but with some tweaking—like adjusting their age or context—it could all fit together more seamlessly. Overall, the lead character is strong, and I love the boldness in the tone. The story definitely grabs attention with its spice and confidence, but a bit more care with punctuation and spacing would elevate it even further. Keep going! Your passion for storytelling shines through, and with some revisions and attention to detail, this could truly blossom into something amazing. Can't wait to see what you do next!""
Had potential
"Few grammatical errors and a bit missing in the plot to explain a few things. Other than that the story had potential to being a good book, shame it ended early. "
Too short, but well written
"A neglected girl does what she can to make it in a make-dominated world, falling for a shady bad boy."
Great Potential
"You've got a solid start here. The plot is enticing. I know you said you felt like you needed to end Liz's story, but that doesn't mean you have to force an ending now. Great things take time. Some stories accumulate over many years before they're done. Take the break you need, but don't cut Liz's story short just because you feel like you owe anyone an ending. Liz seems like a hard-ass character. She deserves her full story and her best ending, not just a people pleaser ending. Keep up the good work! "
A Solid Start
"The author has definitely done a brilliant job of conveying how the character is feeling and why those feelings are valid. She is definitely a character I'd rather be friends than enemies with :) Overall from what I have read there is definitely a solid story to be told, a story of a female trying to prove that she is certainly by far not the weaker gender. If I was to critizise I would just say there is quite a bit of repetition around the 'I's'. "I am'..."I did this"..."I went here" and so on, which can make the writing feel a little abrupt and sharp rather than flow easily. But the again, our girl is certainly abrupt so this could be a reflection on her thought process."
Bold and Moving!
"Overall, the story of Liz is compelling, with its exploration of personal struggle and the desire for freedom. The plot effectively captures Liz's conflict between her dreams and the constraints of her current life, especially through her encounters with Josh. This creates a strong emotional core and keeps readers engaged. In terms of writing style, there are opportunities for refinement. Some transitions between scenes feel a bit abrupt, and certain dialogues could be more nuanced to enhance realism. The author’s technical skills are evident in the character development and the premise, but smoother dialogue and transitions could improve the overall flow and immersion of the story."
Good start much potential
"The story is lovely. It promises much potential. I added some advises under the respective chapters how you could go into more details. Of course you don't have to. All in all I see much potential for a great story. One thing you can definitely add into it a lot more is details and emotions. Don't hold back. You can immerse yourself into your character. Keep in mind your readers don't know anything. Try to be poetic make comparisons to paint pictures in the readers mind. Like " I felt like a light breeze in a desolate landscape. There but still barely noticed by any." And so on. I hope my comments help you and you will soon continue writing. "
